Through The Looking Glass

A woman runs from her lover based on a rumor and expresses her feelings as she's walking through the snow one day.

Like frozen fairies
the snowflakes dance off of my ice cold heart.
Chipping off the solid block
to the soft ice below
whence the memories pass...
Through the looking glass.
Remembering your smile-
I can still hear your laugh
down by the river where we used to meet...
that old cherry tree where you first kissed me...
our love was a flame that burned strong and true.
Nothing could come between us two.
floating through the air as you were my wings
she told me those awful things...
Frozen pixies-
ice cold air..
heavy dead silence.
The cracking of my breaking heart
watch the peices fall apart.
Come see the tender moments pass
through the looking glass.

Reviews

[alifeacoustic]

Very nicely written. looking through that cold looking glass at what was can be cruel on the heart and the mind, but we cannot choose what our mind thinks of and the torment will continue. first lines are fantastic, Like frozen fairies the snowflakes dance off of my ice cold heart, with a really strong ending too. Great job.

[annalysiar]

Thank you for reading and enjoying my poem in really glad you enjoyed it

[alifeacoustic]

You're very welcome.

[B. Boileau]

A true romance, dancing along living in limerence... and than the word of a story of a something truth or not, it's enough to make it all crumble love perfection gone... An well written emotional piece.



bill

[annalysiar]

Thank you you are kind

[viola]

Ooh, I like this one too! What interesting imagery. I also really like just the few rhymes, it makes them stand out. And I love the final four lines. I might make them a separate stanza. I want them to stand out more!
Two thoughts. One I might use ellipses, less frequently. I think they loose there power when they are there all the time, unless you are trying to convey very halting thoughts or speech every line. Second, these two lines don't quite fit together for me
"floating through the air as you were my wings
she told me those awful things..."
Are they supposed to go together, or are they two separate thoughts? Should they be separated with a comma or period or something? Or am I being obtuse. That happens frequently!
Again, lovely poem, wonderful, unusual imagery--all that cracking ice!

[annalysiar]

No you're right that line needs a comma or something I just got it... Thanks. Actually she was halting alot but I can fix it. I'm really glad you liked it. 😆 Tank you soooo much you have no idea how you are helping me😄

[BlueEyedAngel]

Nicely formed and beautifully written.

[William Gardner]

nicely done. It was moving, do the ellipsis help? you already have line breaks I feel the pause in a heavy weighted word. You don't need them, except maybe for the most dramatic pauses?