Empty

Empty

A Poem by Imara
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Just a short poem about an empty cup.

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Empty

A cup; sitting in a puddle of it's lost liquid.

Aging on an open table

Covered in cracks from winters past.

So when filled

The liquid leaves

The cup

Empty



© 2013 Imara



Author's Note

Imara
First poem of the year all critisizms are welcome. The cup is a metaphor for oneself, as I have been feel like I cannot hold emotions lately. I don't feel anything, for short moments maybe but then it quickly leaves.

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Nicely done. I struggle with the empty feeling often. It's hard when you can't even feel a negative emotion, let alone a positive one. Good job

Posted 2 Years Ago


I believe this is what occurs during winter, or as it is passing. A halt to life, as spring nears and with it comes the hustle & bustle of all things. x)

Wheel of The Year, it is an interesting concept, one which holds reality woven as it's string.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think that the second line needs to be rewritten to describe said emptiness.

Aside from that, I like how it wraps up.

Well done.

Hope this helps! Happy trails!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imara

4 Years Ago

Thank you, you were right that second line didn't add much to the meaning. I've changed it. Thanks f.. read more
WizardsAffliction

4 Years Ago

You're most welcome. Anytime.
Great poem, a very good metaphor like you said for a person. Very well done!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed this greatly. You wove a beautiful poem, short, but to the point!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imara

4 Years Ago

Aw thank you :)
Night

4 Years Ago

You are welcome!
I'm glad to see you're back! I like a simple poem like this. Building on a single metaphor helps send a clear message. Unlike a glass, though, your cracks can (and will) heal.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Imara

4 Years Ago

Thank you, I'm glad to be back. I have a lot of homework but I really missed reading and reviewing e.. read more

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Added on November 6, 2013
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Imara
Imara

Cranston, RI



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