Double Notes

Don't you forget about me.

     revel  in   the  hush

     oh                 my

     perfect  little  girl

     they             will

     bury             gods

     with             only

     your             song

know that        i was not

the first        to try it

Reviews

[LJW]

Ok, so WOW again. Most attempts at playing with form fail, at least in my opinion, as in epic fail. For me, the text has to hit just as hard without the form.
This text does. "They will bury gods with only your song" Beyond excellent. Goosebumps on my arms excellent.

You can write because, I sense, you don't really write at all. You are a channeler. 100/100

[Joiedevivre]

you blew me away again in a very different way!

[Hayley]

So creative! I love music, and your poetry goes along with it very well. "Know that I was not the first to try it..."

[roarke]

subtitled: "ta-da"
creative.

[emmajoy]

Clever words, clever format .. nobody should be this good! And, there's more than a sweet touch to the actual meaning

[Kerry O'Connor]

Oh very well done, indeed.
I love the song you have referenced... one of my all time fave movie moments.

[Tommy]

I have never been able to do image forms; I love them, but my mind just doesn’t work that way I guess. This is awesome! Played on the instrument of heart….

Great Write V!
RLG,
Tommy

[Robin]

here I have been trying to think of something to express in the concrete form and you wave this double note in front of me - ha ha

nice work.

[arbitrary jane]

i want to say something about this one.
about burying gods and about that line 'my perfect little girl.'
... but the only thing my mind seems to have to say is
'mmmm.'