Rebuttal

A poem attempting to draw attention on the serious issue of domestic violence.

Pessimism throngs my life,

when you get down to strife.

The pain you inflict,

mere remains of conflict.

My wounds seem shallow,

but the heart bleeds deep,

and I stay silent,

calm,

non - violent.

I gulp down your abuse,

plead for a worthy truce.

But, finally I burst,

to quench my revenge thirst,

destroying your notions,

thwarting the systems in motions.

I rise, to your surprise,

and with my rattling crest,

your lives are put to test.

The turmoil, distressing yet subtle.

But, a strong rebuttal.

Author's Note

I have draw similarities to Mother Earth in this poetry.

Reviews

[Perkele.7885]

So C Kumar, you are speaking as the earthquake in your poem here, am I correct? If this is the case, just what have the humans done over the years in Nepal except live their lives if they are residents or climb the mountains if they are not. Why is nature so upset?

[Chirag Kumar]

Even that is a fair point of view. But I am assuming the mankind as a whole against nature, the damage we have done to Her and how she gives it back to us through such calamities which occur in several parts of the world.

[Perkele.7885]

Ok, not just Nepal then. That would be entirely unjust!

[Chirag Kumar]

I made this poem after learning about the disasters in Nepal. But I agree with you on this.

[Sibusiso Xtdo Gama]

Rebuttal!! laddies and gentlemen.

''My wounds seem shallow,
but the heart bleeds deep, and I stay silent, calm, non - violent''

Through all the abuse you finally escape, damn now that is a ''Room to Roam''. Contender contender. Wow!!

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your appreciation Gama :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

Awesome write sir. Amazed by your words. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your review Gurleen :)

[Gurleen Saluja]

You're welcome. :)

[Mayank]

One can relate this to natural calamity and loss of inner peace, you lose both of them after a good tolerance.

[alf]

Hi C Kumar. This is an emotional write, stirred by events happening and enhanced by your emotional state. Loved the way you have personified the tragedies and yet manage to inspire hope!! alf

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for the feedback brother :)

[Mitali Shah]

Loved it Chirag the flow is awesome of the cause and the effect that your notion goes into-
My wounds seem shallow but the heart bleeds deep,
and i stay silent calm Non - violent. I gulp down your abuse plead for a worthy truce.
But finally I burst to quench my revenge thirst destroying your notions.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for appreciating my work Didi :)

[Mitali Shah]

your welcome

[marcus]

'My wounds seem shallow
but the heart bleeds deep'
Really liked this line!!!

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for the feeback Marcus :)

[marcus]

RISE-UP! and take no s**t. I really liked this, nice flow.

[Saddam]

but the heart bleeds deep,
and i stay silent
calm
Non - violent.

Creative, wise and beautiful write. Can understand the feelings. Good job friend.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for the review Saddam :)

[Robert]

Writing down what you feel are always the best poems Kumar. Good job.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for the review Robert :D