Modest Love

Under the roof of skies

darker than ink,

you are with me,

beside the bonfire.

Despite a cold night,

I can feel you,

your warmth,

caressing me,

raring to be quenched

by mine.

 

No words are exchanged,

no acts of intimacy.

Love simply travels through our gazes.

Through these subtle gazes,

I dive deep into you,

and discover myself.

And reality strikes me there,

that I am nothing without you.

I thrive on you.

 

They say,

when you're in love,

your hands tremble,

heartbeats multiply,

knees weaken up.

But that isn't the case with me,

for I am at ease with you.

No agitation in mind.

No anxiety in kind.

 

The moon melts above,

showering bountiful of its divinity on us.

I have you in my embrace.

We stay quiet,

but our hearts whisper,

and express everything,

words couldn't.

 

- C Kumar

   Sept 1 2015

Reviews

[paulina misiewicz]

I like this poem..it's like a next level of loving you talk about here and it's a subject very close to my heart..currently :) i think it's difficult to write poems about that kind of love because of its simplicity and purity and i believe you've done a great job here, as you made me understand, feel, appreciate...thanks for sharing!

[Chirag Kumar]

My aim was to keep the poem as simple as possible. Love is infinite. No words can describe everything about it. I am glad you liked my work. Thanks for commenting :)

[andrew mitchell]

A romantic poem well written

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks Andrew :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A beautiful poem filled with tender yet intense feelings.
Loved the romantic scene you painted there.
Enjoyed it!

[Chirag Kumar]

I am glad you liked it. Thanks for the review :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[B]

A lovely write about being in love
Oh i know this too well

Perfect timing

Sweet as ever

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for reading my work Nisreenaa :)

[Willard Wells]

NIce piece and I did see some areas where a little re write would help. Great thoughts and feelings.

"I can feel you,
your warmth,
caressing me,
raring to be quenched
by mine."

The above did not work for me. Raring to be quenched by mine??? what?? Does not flow in my opinion and is not clear what will be quenched since the sentence talks of warmth.

[Chirag Kumar]

Yeah I agree. Something wrong there. Will try to make some changes in it. Suggestions are always welcome :)

[Perkele.7885]

Chirag, this is okay, but, this falls far from your better poems. I am just being honest with you because, I like your work and I won't sugar coat it. This is an okay poem if that is what you are looking for but, I think that you are looking for better.

[Chirag Kumar]

Thanks for your valuable feedback Raj. Will write better ones next time :)