Time is just a number

At first sight can't be real, but

how many dates, h'many meals, and

when are we allowed to feel, so

many thoughts so what's the deal, now.

At first sight can't exist, but

held from fingertip to wrist, and

joyful everytime he's kissed, so

many reasons  here to list, now.

At first sight there's no way, but 

every night and every day, and

how she moves in just that way, so

all he wants is her to stay, now.

At first sight maybe not, but

by now his heart she's caught, and

love like this cannnot be taught, so

where it goes is where it ought, now.

Author's Note

Criticism welcomed. Thanks for reading.

Reviews

[Becca Bishop]

Oh my gosh!!!! I'm just gonna start right off by saying that the way you set up this poem, with everything rhyming and all the lines ending, respectively, with but, and, so and now, must've been super duper hard to do!!! I don't know why I felt the need to explain to you how you set your poem up. Sorry. My brain isn't connected to my fingers. I'm liable to just blurt stuff out. Anyway, moving on.

I kinda though that this was sort of a romance thingy? Am I right? Well, I liked it either way. It was more fast paced than most of the other similar themed poetry that I've read. Not that that's a bad thing. After all it gets pretty boring to read about unrequited love and such again and again.

Kudos to YOU!!! Caps Lock ROCKS does it not??? I guess I'll finish this off with a grand finale of sorts:

AWESOME POEM!!!!!! LOVED IT!!!!! By the way, since I was the first one to comment that automatically makes me your biggest fan. WOOO!!!!!

P.S. Sorry if this review seemed all over the place, but it's Halloween, you know? I'm all hyped up and read to go steal my siblings' candy.
P.P.S. GREAT JOB WRITING THIS POEM!!!!!! SUPER DUPER DE DUM WONDERFUL!!!!
DE DUM DE DUM DE DUM!!!! CANDY TIME!!!!

Kudos to YOU!!! Caps Lock ROCKS