The Error Of My Ways

Stunning!!!! Thank you for entering the Thoughts contest. Sorry it has taken so long to read through.

Josie

Posted 2 Months Ago

Don't you think we really do learn more by making mistakes, especially if we try desperately never to make the same mistakes again. Nobody's perfect.

There's so much honesty and sincerity in your words that almost humble intentions: ' My life has been both heartache. Along by spirits of love in rain. Tossed up around and foundered. With the dreams I cannot attain. ' Because we make mistakes doesn't mean we can't dream and dream again.

This is such a lovely piece of writing, beautifully formatted, words that ring with understanding of self, and, consequently, has great riches to share.

Posted 4 Months Ago

I like this poem because it rings with honesty. Congratulations on being poet of the month!

Posted 4 Months Ago

Wisdom and pain may have taken some of your carefree ways, but they have replaced them with a light of understanding that can help many see their own path clearer.....really beautiful and wistful, I could feel the ache of longing in your words for what could have been.

Posted 5 Months Ago

mis-spent youth~ so it would seem~ we just don't see

the errors of our ways and therefore we do miss so much,indeed,

well expressed and nicely penned!

Posted 5 Months Ago

Wow this one was full of wisdom.. soft undertones of sadness creeping out of the entire writing. Many will understand this one.. even those chasing dreams.. for if they have not achieved other things such as building a family.. some have to choose.. and can not have both. Great deep rhythm.. rhyme was spot on.. the story was sad but empowering all the same. I loved the lines:

For life's time waits on none of us.
It masters fate with earnest callous.
Caring for none in favored mercy.
Helping not who it shows malice.

Pondering.. how life should show such malice to some and not others.. I believe it is sometimes our own doing but sometimes other things can add to that pain or joy.. I like the fact that you can feel both the heartache and love in the rain and remember each.. this is the balance that many feel.. a very realistic touch to this piece. Better to live .. than not lived at all.. even making mistakes! Thank you very much for sharing! =)

Posted 7 Months Ago

I was drawn to your poem by its title...the ebullience of youth and also its mishaps...i especially like the idea that it's not really a poem of regret, rather a celebration of the recklessness of being a free spirit...wonderful stuff...

Posted 7 Months Ago

I can almost hear the song inside this poem. It could be folk or even soul but I like its rythm and spirit. Thanks!

Posted 7 Months Ago