Love

Walking to the beach listening to music

The only thing I see is the road in front of me

The road that’s leading me to where I wanna go

Leading me to the person I want to see most in the world

Every step I take is a step closer to you

 

I knew I loved you when I say you for the first time

It felt so real, free, and familiar

Like I’ve been waiting for this my whole life

You stole my heart that day and forever more

You pulled my guard down right from under me

You took away the key to my heart

You said its mine to protect now

 

You are my angel, the most perfect thing ever

With the kindest and sweetest heart

Who loves and cares about everyone

It’s the most beautiful thing in the world

 

When you smile it melts my heart

The butterflies in my tummy that flutter nonstop

They’re even worse when I see you

Your voice so pure and sweet

It could put me to sleep

 

The first time you said I love you

You said it so clearly, completely sincere

You didn’t hesitate or fumble

I couldn’t believe it a guy like you so perfect

And a girl like me so not

But then you said it again even sweeter

You said I’ll love you till the sun stops burning

 

You looked in my eyes and saw my reaction

You held your arms open waiting for me

I jumped into them tears running down my face

I looked into your eyes and said I love you too

 

So here we, I’ve finally arrived to meet you

I look over the wall to see you standing there

I lose my breath and have to steady myself

You’re just standing there perfect as ever

Letting the waves crash over your feet

 

I run up behind you and splash you

All you do is turn around and smile

You kiss me on the cheek and then take a step back

You say to me that I’ve had your heart since the day we met

Will you do me the honor and keep mine

You looked up and saw the answer in my face

You took me in your arms and hugged me tight

Reviews

[Confidential]

First thing's first- there's a couple technical errors I'd like to point out. First, the fourth line of the last stanza: "You say to me that I've had your heart since they day we meet"; you seem to have put 'they' instead of 'the' and at the very end of that same line you appear to have accidentally put an extra 'e' in what was meant to be the word 'met'. Finally, the very last line of the poem, "You took me in your arms and hugged my tight". It should read "You took me in your arms and hugged ME tight". Now, these are both technical mistakes that can be fixed in a matter of seconds at the push of a few buttons, and if we ignore them completely, we are still left with a heartwarming poem that will undoubtedly make anybody who happens upon it smile, just as it made me!
On a sidenote, I thought for a moment when first reading this that it was an acrostic poem,- you probably didn't do this on purpose, but look at the entire first stanza. The first letter in each line spell the word "whittle" almost perfectly, all that's missing is the 'h', hahaha. Just something I noticed that I found amusing. Good work on this poem.

Respect,
-Confidential

[x]

sounds like a dream come true...

go enjoy and live it.

[Immortal1967]

That is so sweet. Loved it :) Very good style.

[Faceless Love]

I love how you used red to express your feelings. Great write :)

[al25]

Your poem is great. I love the way you describe your feelings.