Questioning

Questioning

A Poem by Amila Jay
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14/07/12

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Something is not right these days

My mind is going insane

Troubles and troubles

Yells and yells

And reasoning to myself

I walk like dead scarecrow dug out of its grave

Holding a light over my head

Before I fall and a break a leg

© 2012 Amila Jay


Author's Note

Amila Jay
The last line was originally *Cause I might fall and break a leg* but I changed it to *Before I fall and break a leg*
Just pondering to myself again with all the stress at work and just decided to jot this down. Your comments are appreciated :))

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"I walk like dead scarecrow dug out of its grave
Holding a light over my head
Before I fall and a break a leg"

Absolutely love these three lines. I think I have walked in that scarecrow's shoes quite some times myself.

Posted 9 Years Ago


That's bad !!! Try to get the reason why it happens !
Technically speaking the poem is amazing, although it's very short, it is full of pathos,
the sound is intuitive and natural, the metrica almost perfect,
great job =D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Pax
a brilliant used of images...i like it..

Posted 11 Years Ago


i like the scarecrow line the best. it gives you a good description of how the character would look and act and walk like. great poem once again!!! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I`ve read a lot of Amila`s writing, and I like it. This is good too, with its wry, ironical feeling and a great last line.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch :))
very interesting..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

thanks :))
I feel ya!! I feel like this a lot. Excellent portrayal.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

Thanks :-D
The mind can't figure out this world. Too much to think about. I like the comparing yourself to the scarecrow. A interesting ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the review :-D
Painful feelings touch more.. Great poem.. :-)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

11 Years Ago

True!!! Thanks for the review :-D

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Tags: life, problems, burden, people, questions, wave, sand, thoughts

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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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