The Stranger

A poem about a stranger..

It was cold outside
With mist on all sides
When a galloping was heard
From the west of the hillside
The wind was howling into the night
He got down from his horse
And forced his way by
There was a small brown cottage
With a dimly lit lamp inside
He knocked on the hard door
With a timid knock
Not hard enough to hear
And waited for sometime
His heavy breath lapsing against life
The dimly lit lamp went off in a while
He thought to himself and went past by
And the stranger went on till early morn
Before he died

Author's Note

This was the first poem that I wrote when I was in grade 9.....so let me know views...thanks:D

Reviews

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

NICE.......YOU DID A REALLY GREAT JOB AT THAT POINT OF TIME....................I also wrote a poem at 9th grade.......and it was just 10 liner .....this made me remember that...lol........................................................but this is really nice poem ....:-)

[M Garcia]

Very nicely done, especially for being in the 9th grade when you're (in some places) just learning poetry. Keep it up!

[Eric Cox]

I like this piece, very nice write. :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

Such an epic tale in such consise format...starts off so graphically I was moved by the eeriness of the opening phrases... Thanks

[Quill~]

Amazing piece! This is brilliantly written in 9th grade. Excellent work.

[R J Askew]

This evokes a scene which cld be from a Thomas Hardy novel. It is all there. Romance, tragedy, death. You were wide awake in grade 9!

[Muse]

What I like to do with old poetry...is try rewriting it. Keep the original...you never want to delete the original...keep the the essence of it near. But with your current writing abilities...see what you can do with it. I see a lot of potential here for you to recreate another masterpiece. :)

Muse

[Rhea752]

the poem was amazing and the description blew me away keep it up

[Lovely Lady]

You floored me! and that is not easy. Keep writing. I want to read every word if more is like this on. Full of life and its mystery. You're my kind of writer.
~lovely♥lady♥poet, and spoken word artist!

[Revery]

This is fascinating. It has a quality in the depth and uniqueness of the story. The message and theme is well delivered and it is tight as poetic verse. Great job.

[Daydreamer54]

Wow, i liked how is rhymed in some parts and how its told like asotry. This is pretty good. great write! ^^