The Stranger

A poem about a stranger..

It was cold outside
With mist on all sides
When a galloping was heard
From the west of the hillside
The wind was howling into the night
He got down from his horse
And forced his way by
There was a small brown cottage
With a dimly lit lamp inside
He knocked on the hard door
With a timid knock
Not hard enough to hear
And waited for sometime
His heavy breath lapsing against life
The dimly lit lamp went off in a while
He thought to himself and went past by
And the stranger went on till early morn
Before he died

Author's Note

This was the first poem that I wrote when I was in grade 9.....so let me know views...thanks:D

Reviews

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

NICE.......YOU DID A REALLY GREAT JOB AT THAT POINT OF TIME....................I also wrote a poem at 9th grade.......and it was just 10 liner .....this made me remember that...lol........................................................but this is really nice poem ....:-)

[Tate Morgan]

For a 9 yr old it was exceptional

[dreaming dame]

So mysterious, but something I could read over and over. :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Nice imagery! Very captivating to the reader. =) I like it.

[Relic]

A well-penned poem for such a sprout of that age. This is a good poem for a dark night. I like the font usage, it seems to fit comfortably with the theme of the writing. Although I must say I'm wondering what his ailment was? The plague perhaps?

I enjoyed this poem very much.

[Cassie Fraga]

very well write for it being a first time piece... very nice indeed!!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love it! Great story within this poem!

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a mystery here... the questions that rise as to the stranger... the night darkness his cloak... You pull us into the scene and we all stand in wonder in the early morning darkness...

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good first poem. Remind of the story. Where Jesus went to many places and no-one would assist. In the end. The poorest of the people gave him bread and drink. They were blessed and rewarded. Your poem ending was so kind. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[joshua deathdealer]

Wow this brilliantly wrote. Great imagery and I love the font color..xx

[Richielee]

well if you wrote this then you must of been one bright pupil, vivid and mysterious