The Spider

The Spider

A Poem by Amila Jay
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Silent Creeper

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Silent creeper
With thin legs
Came down
In the invisibility
Of a thread
Eyed all corners
And built a web
Smooth and royal
Like a bed
And waited for his guest
A little black ant
Who walked right into his trap

© 2011 Amila Jay


Author's Note

Amila Jay
As always..lemme know your views..thanks:)

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Awesome! I hate spiders as a rule but this poem made them seem elegant and intriguing! Great write

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lovely write, hmmm spiders, I hope it was a black widdow ;) gnegne :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

lol cute write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

good write !!! :) liked it !!! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very cute and wonderful ^_^ I like it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice one. it reminds me of the lines, " Will you come into my parlour said the spider to the fly" which we used to read in our school-days.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice and smooth trap to lay down for the enemys food......

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I hate flies so therefore adore spiders as apart from being beautiful they eat flies lol. Love the way you penned the spiders day and showed their creativity. Keep em' coming

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so cute. I recently wrote a poem of a spider but havent posted yet. It was black and ugly and scary. You penned this well. I really enjoyed reading it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like spiders and this is very well done. :) I like the rhyme scheme. I wonder if the last line would work without the word "Who"? Just a thought :) Enjoyed this very much :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 15, 2011
Last Updated on December 13, 2011
Tags: nature, insects, spiders, teens, fantasy, life

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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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