Last Breath

death of a lover

I was held at the will of your last embrace
As I grasped on to the memory of your eyes
Looking back at mine; Asking me why
Though you didn't utter a single goodbye
You were close to tears and my heart ached in fear
So I clasped your hands and kissed it with all my might
To take this rose; our symbol of love

And burn it the minute I die

Author's Note

lemme know your views, thanks:)

Reviews

[Ursula Kay Vos]

A good write overall. Great reminecance. You have captured the moment very well in this and displayed it for who ever reads this poem. In the few short lines of this poem you have expressed deep emotions of a parting of young love and death. A sentimental rose was a very beautifully dramatic addition to the ending that brings this poem full circle. Line to line it has a harmony and tugs on your hearts strings and for anyone who has ever loved and lost, it is something that is relateable! Great read.

[Destiny]

It made me feel like when my first love told me he loved me but went off with another girl. Our love never died until we do but it still hurts.

[Art]

this is a very nice poem...filled with a sadness that shows the last view of memories...

[Daytonight]

Beautiful and yet poignant. Well done.

[Ambrosine]

That was simply beautiful I love it!

[rt farris]

a bittersweet moment. true love manifests itself at times and in ways that can take your breath away. nice work.

[Break The Broken]

wow. i dont even know what else to saythatwas amazing expecailly the part bout the rose. C:

[Chris Taylor]

This has a great feel of missing a lover without the regret of lost days. I love concise poems like this. So much can be said in so little a verse. Great Job Amila!

[InkSlinger]

A tragic last breath.. nicely penned!

[Yari Garcia (Older Prof..]

I think it's beautiful and sad and tragic all at once!

[Pradnya]

good one