Deluge

Surface ripples in the lake,

gasping breathes do I intake.
As I struggle to the shore,
over, under it does implore,
That I stay a little longer,
as these waves grow even stronger.
A force of nature now adheres,
yielding bitter, salty tears.

Reviews

[Mary]

i like this very much

[Stephen Tysinger]

thanks! :)

[Maya Storm]

I like the rhyme scheme and the flow. A very weathered imagery, for a piece so short you packed a lot and delivered a pretty good atmosphere.

[Stephen Tysinger]

thank you! I usually write short and to the point, so flow is important to me in my pieces! glad you enjoyed it!