The Madness of Morning

A conversation with my demon

Here she is again,

sitting on my bed.

She stares at me,

menacingly,

a twinkle in her eye.

“She can’t be real”.

I’m muttering to myself...

***

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

***

“I try!”, I cry...

“I beg you every day!

I plead with you to set me free!

I take this bolus...

The healers…

They promised me!

But here your are...

Fixated on my soul!”

***

She crawls across my bed,

Enjoying this charade.

She awakens the voices

That rest inside my head,

And now... The games begin.

***

“Arise, my demons!

It’s time to play.

Our friend right here

Is crumbling, you see...

Let us soothe her mind.”

***

“No, no,” I plead,

“Let's not today.

My heart is weak.

It’s filled with pain.

This game we play…

I can’t endure!

Please let my body rest”

***

I pull out my bottle,

The new pill prescribed

It promised relief

from visions unreal.

I pull off the cap.

I swallow one down.

***

I hear the girl cry.

The voices protest.

The noise is subsiding,

My heart feeling free.

Finally... Sweet reality...

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

Even with the 'sweet reality' of the finale, this is incredibly chilling and intense...I take a lot of meds for a lot of different things, so this piece just hit me like a ton of bricks...wow...I could easily imagine this being acted out on a stage...

“Yet, here I am, everyday,

All set for your mind and I to vie.

If I’m not real,

If I don’t exist,

Then why not make me go?

That stanza made me gulp...amazing work...you definitely gripped me with this one :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and giving such positive feedback. I too, suffer from a mental illness and am currently fighting for disability. One thing that helps keep me going is my writing and knowing that some of the most creative people in the world suffered as we do.

[kublakhan27]

I know just how you feel...I was actually just finishing a piece that veers a bit into the same territory...always a pleasure :)

[Troy Henson]

This piece played out so well. The imagery was haunting and had me sit up straight. You speak of heart ache and despair in this and the suffering of an illness runs deep in each and every line. Well done. Masterful

Troy

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much for your kind words

[Pryde Foltz]

Spine chilling, Briana … the secret … those entities live in all of us.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Linda alexander]

This poem is very true for those biological clock works opposite, liked th presentation and the picture

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading. :D

[The Nude Writer]

I don't like waking up.. It seems worse for you maybe ;) hehe. Very fun topic we all can enjoy

[Briana O'Connor]

lol thank you for reading

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It kinda sounds like someone suffering from schizophrenia, quite an interesting read for sure, I highly enjoyed it.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome sweetie.

[Dark Poet]

Wow. I can't explain the chill that passed through me reading this. This is exactly what it feels like, and you wrote it so perfectly. Gorgeous words and painful too

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[RAOrourke]

She crawls across my bed,

Enjoying this charade.

She awakens the voices

That rest inside my head
I liked this stanza! Your poem is very well written and the reality behind this type of scene can be so real for some. Such imagery comes to mind reading your poems. Well written!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much :D

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, a conversation that leaves one with a sense of dread and passion all mixed into one! well done, good read.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Dayran]

The play ...as we refer to it ...is also the heart of creation. It created the human so that it can continue to play. Our references to it however ... don't always understand that it is a lot like us. We sometimes overdo it ... but pass the responsibility to someone else.But when we relate ...and share in the joys and sadness ...it is a true friend indeed. Nice ...

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you for reading

[NeiL ArandA]

Im not a morning person myself . But if theres a pill that would make you breeze through the week I might . You penned it with such a long and detailed words . Coffee perks me up in the morning but never struggle to drink it . Try to avoid the sugar though and try to drink it pl
I think the muse in this piece has more barriers and challenge other than just mundane morning rush and routine ...

[Briana O'Connor]

It's about a schitzophrenic room mate I used to have. She used to wake up every morning and have conversation with this mean little girl who haunted her.

[NeiL ArandA]

Sounds like the movie The Beautiful Mind ..