The Entity That Binds

"I Can't Say Challenge" This challenge was about describing bricks without using the words brick or block.

Gradient,

Radiant in the light

Of the moon and the sun.

These rectangular cubes,

They form this edifice with perfection.

I run my finger across its surface

Enjoying the texture on my skin:

Deeply red

Contrasting the seal

That binds them.

I gaze at the beauty,

The structure of solidity.

No man can conquer this form

Without machine.

I marvel at this creation,

This bond of homes and buildings,

In which each being relies.

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Harmony-Lee]

WOW! how very clever you are.

[Briana O'Connor]

thankyou :D

[Rana]

Immensely interesting is the idea behind this and it was such fun reading this. So much of creativity.. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you so much :D

[Baby Ricochet]

Reads like someone staring at a brick wall after they smoked some really good s**t. I get WAY to groovy if I smoke weed so I don't indulge. It aught to be legal though. Lets get high at a gay wedding. You know the gays would have really good s**t at a wedding reception. They don't do anything half way.

[Briana O'Connor]

Lmao. If only I could smoke weed responsibly and it didn't cause horrible problems for me when sober I would totally be down! :P Thank you for reading.

[stars are far]

that was great work, well done .. :)

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Sindu]

That's an immensely beautified description of bricks. Felt like a memory reading about running fingers along the pattern and staring at an architectural wonder. Great take on the challenge. Great penning as always :)

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you so much

[spitballing]

Has a really good flow to it. Lots of catchy wording.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[NeiL ArandA]

From mud I came
harvested from the ground
trampled by hoofs and pelting rain
My true form harness by searing heat

[Briana O'Connor]

??????????????????

[NeiL ArandA]

Just spinning some lines ..without saying Brick

[Briana O'Connor]

ooooooooh lol

[Dayran]

Its quite wonderful to see the brick buildings ... especially in homes. Creates quite an ambiance. Nicely said.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you very much

[MomzillaNC]

Very well done… excellent answer to the challenge. "Deeply red; Contrasting the seal; That binds them." Great descriptive lines saying everything about bricks without giving anything away!

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you :D

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Rocans]

This read well. Everything is well articulated. I think in the second line you misspelled "Radiant" but that's water under the bridge. A refreshing read.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for pointing that out. my spell checker failed me!

[Rocans]

:( Happens to the best of us...