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A Poem by Briana O'Connor

Beautiful is the spirit which drifts in the wind

Up on the mountain tops and down by the sea


Beautiful is the soul which dances through the mist

All through the valley and amongst the shore


Man stands before me simple to the eye

But my heart senses his complexity

The depth of the being that lies within


Woman sits in waiting, elegantly timeless

Smiling through the windows that outline her eyes

Leading to the secrets masked by allure


Shallow is the nature of perception

Divided into pieces by exterior poise

Seeing each costume, failing to feel

Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche


Bless-ed am I to have seen through the charade

Meeting each moment as if it were the last

Studying each flaw, surveying each gem


Gifted are the observers of the beyond

For beyond is the love, the reason and the hope

There lies the truth that drives each step


Beautiful is the spirit that drifts with the spirit

Accepting the flaws as perfection at its pique


Beautiful is the soul that dances with the soul

Drowning out criticism with the grace of a dove

© 2015 Briana O'Connor


Author's Note

Briana O'Connor
Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

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Powerful and good words.
"Beautiful is the soul that dances with the soul
Drowning out criticism with the grace of a dove"
I like the purpose and the positive tone of the poetry. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


Well said.......effectively put!!!
flawless poetry!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you so much :D
Indeed! We need more spirits like this!

"Man stands before me simple to the eye
But my heart senses his complexity
The depth of the being that lies within" - great stanza!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
Wow! What a beautiful poem Briana! I love the message and how you've penned it! Well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
this is a lovely poem - part prayer, part song, and part story. Eloquent and lyrical.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
I love the words that you use here and I could see this poem just unfolding beautifully. It's so true. This sort of beauty is really what makes living worth it all.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D
Beautiful is the spirit which drifts in the wind
Up on the mountain tops and down by the sea...loved this line! Your words were beautifully chosen, to create such vivid imagery for the reader. I loved the flow to your poem as well!


Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you so much :D
Wow. I am rather impressed with this one Briana. The repetition and the cadence worked well. Your ideas were expressed powerfully and lucidly. I think these lines were very instructive:

"Shallow is the nature of perception
Divided into pieces by exterior poise
Seeing each costume, failing to feel
Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche"

Visual perceptions are mostly illusions masking a more real and substantial reality.

Nicely penned!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you so much for your kind words :D
Rocans

9 Years Ago

My pleasure...
It is wonderful to be able to see through the smoke and mirrors. It is then that we are able to see that which makes life rich and beautiful:

Shallow is the nature of perception
Divided into pieces by exterior poise
Seeing each costume, failing to feel
Neglecting to unmask the inner psyche

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you very much :D
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ANM
Lovely poem crafted with aplomb!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

9 Years Ago

thank you :D

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Briana O'Connor
Briana O'Connor

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