Passes Through Gain - Blitz Colab

Passes Through Gain - Blitz Colab

A Poem by Briana O'Connor
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50 line poem collaboration with Richard Allen Beevor, Momzilla, Pushkar Prabhat, Sindu, Realmwriter, Jordan, Music Maniac

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Yesterday is gone

Yesterday has passed


Passed now unto Today

Passed fast by… moved on


On wings away

on clouds ever out


Out of time, out of mind;

out of place, out of space


space to live life

space to hide and die


Die a million times.

Die infinitely more


More pain to acquire

More blood to be shed


Shed in hate

Shed for dogma


Dogma  true without question

dogma no room for suggestion


Suggestion: just follow

Suggestion: stay hollow


Hollow words, empty talk

hollow halls none shall speak


Speak to me not of hatred yesterday

Speak to me of compassion today


Today, the moon says goodbye

Today, a new sun will rise


Rise to the call of the hope

Rise to the call and be transformed


Transformed our hearts and minds

Transformed all base desires


Desires to persuade the will within

Desires to conquer and prevail


Prevail we must, step by step

Prevail we will, this we pledge


Pledge our arms to the cause

Pledge to keep alive a flame


Flame dancing in beautiful glory

Flame rising hither and high


High hopes in the patriot's heart

High ideals written in blood


Blood shed upon the fields

Blood valiant and true

True to honor and to duty

True to what we knew


Knew of those times and the pain

Knew of all to lose, to gain


Gain! What gain?

Gain an experience, sufficient!


Sufficient

Gain



© 2015 Briana O'Connor



Author's Note

Briana O'Connor
Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

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Very impressed.
Haven't read a piece that's constructed like that before - both powerful and inspiring.
Well done
:-)

Posted 5 Months Ago


Wow! this is beautiful.. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D
A great piece indeed from tow tallented Poets.

Well done



Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D
keep up the good work I loved this poem had great flow it

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D
A great start and a wonderful ending. You guys nailed it. The write flows smoothly.
Thumbs up to you all...:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thanks. this was a lot of fun. :D
A great team work indeed.. Writing this would have so much like playing a game.. It has come out very nice, and feel this would have been quite tough.. Something amazing it is; emanates a sense of togetherness and consequently strenght..

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D It was a lot of fun watching this spin together.
Nice. Uplifting and inspiration write. A bright spot of the day's reading!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D We all had a lot of fun writing this.
It is always interesting to write together with others on here, I hadn't seen one with this many on a blitz.
Well done all.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D
Wow Really cool collaboration! Flowed wonderfully and can't believe how well it all fits together! Congratulations!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D
I love how you started it!
Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Briana O'Connor

3 Years Ago

thank you :D

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Briana O'Connor

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