Passes Through Gain - Blitz Colab

50 line poem collaboration with Richard Allen Beevor, Momzilla, Pushkar Prabhat, Sindu, Realmwriter, Jordan, Music Maniac

Yesterday is gone

Yesterday has passed

Passed now unto Today

Passed fast by… moved on

On wings away

on clouds ever out

Out of time, out of mind;

out of place, out of space

space to live life

space to hide and die

Die a million times.

Die infinitely more

More pain to acquire

More blood to be shed

Shed in hate

Shed for dogma

Dogma  true without question

dogma no room for suggestion

Suggestion: just follow

Suggestion: stay hollow

Hollow words, empty talk

hollow halls none shall speak

Speak to me not of hatred yesterday

Speak to me of compassion today

Today, the moon says goodbye

Today, a new sun will rise

Rise to the call of the hope

Rise to the call and be transformed

Transformed our hearts and minds

Transformed all base desires

Desires to persuade the will within

Desires to conquer and prevail

Prevail we must, step by step

Prevail we will, this we pledge

Pledge our arms to the cause

Pledge to keep alive a flame

Flame dancing in beautiful glory

Flame rising hither and high

High hopes in the patriot's heart

High ideals written in blood

Blood shed upon the fields

Blood valiant and true

True to honor and to duty

True to what we knew

Knew of those times and the pain

Knew of all to lose, to gain

Gain! What gain?

Gain an experience, sufficient!

Sufficient

Gain

Author's Note

Please feel free to be as constructively honest as you wish. Any suggestions or corrections are much appreciated. Do not rate or review based on opinion or subject of this piece. If you would like the favor returned please send me a read request or a message with the piece you wish for me to review! Happy writing :D

Reviews

[Steve L.]

What a cool collab!! Well done!!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Briana O'Connor]

"ah... very nice indeed.. this journey that you have taken your reader on... I can't pick out a favorite line as it all blends so well together and completes the picture...Very nice job indeed

[Briana O'Connor]

Thank you. We had a lot of fun with this one.

[MomzillaNC]

Turned out rather well… :D

[Pushkar Prabhat]

okay so this is how it was supposed to end............!!!
it is beautiful........and i thank you for this amazing opportunity(no flattery, it was your challenge)!!!
i loved it!!!
:)
p.s. i think you missed Richards' name.......He did most of the work!

[Briana O'Connor]

Oh crap! Thank you for pointing that out. I just copied and pasted his mention from his page. der der der! I will fix that right away!

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome..........i figured that must be it! :) :)

[Dayran]

Brings a fresh new note of appeal in every verse. Invigorating!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Woody]

seven hearts throbbing as one. seven minds well attuned towards one common goal.
Bravo!

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you :D

[Mayank]

felt more like a discussion taking place between 7 person, the expressions are quite visible.... it reminds me lot of the days when me and my friends were bunch of rebels.

[Briana O'Connor]

thank you for reading

[Sam]

Wow. Seven person collaboration, and the finished product is this? Well done. It must have taken forever to accomplish.

[Briana O'Connor]

that it did lol

[R Smith]

that's great, i think i misunderstood how it ends but this is perfect and you gave it a title, a brilliant poem Brianna, thanks for that :)

[Briana O'Connor]

there's actually a rule on the title too lol. this poem has LOTS of rules :P

[Briana O'Connor]

I love how you didn't even notice I forgot to mention your name lol. I copied and pasted this from your page and didn't even bother to check if all the names were there. I'm such a spaztard :P

[R Smith]

oh yeah, thanks for making me use my eyes haha, what was the title rule i missed that as i did the end, obviously i'm more the spaztard here, thanks for putting me back and for giving us the blitz it was good fun :)

[Jordan]

This turned out very well, despite the fact that many different authors with many different ideas participated. I like it!