Moth and Fire

A poem about the moth who fell in love with the fire.

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Captivated

Spellbound

By the passionate heat

The warmth

Of sweet temptation

Luring me

To come closer

To take a taste

To feel the fire

Of love and lust

And life and death

And my feeble silvery wings

Dance around you

Around and around

In sweet surrender

And worship

And desire

To dip my tongue

To your delicious flames

And feel your lethal kiss

Like a moth to the fire

I'm drawn to you

Like a moth to the fire

I love you

To my death.

Author's Note

This is my first time to write a free verse. (My comfort zone used to be a poem with rhymes.) I really have no idea if this one is good enough. Your comments would help me a lot. Thanks in advance. :)

Reviews

[Sioranth Smith]

I write a lot of free verse and I really enjoyed this poem. It read very easily on the first pass and contains great imagery that kept my interest throughout. I would actually say the last stanza isn't needed at all since it just repeats what was already alluded to in the rest of the poem.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks for telling me what you think, Sioranth. :)

[Patrick O'Neil]

Really good, even without the rhymes there is a good flow, that binds everything together. Well done.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Pete! Nice meeting you! :)

[Patrick O'Neil]

Youre welcome.:)

[Mia]

Yes its good…you can be proud. I’m still not sure if I think it’s cute in a lovey dovey romantic way or if I think it’s creepy in a stalker I’m obsessed with your face way…but I did enjoy it!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Interesting! I like your interpretation that this might be about a creepy stalker, though the first meaning is more accurate. Your ideas are superb. It had me laughing, actually. :)

[Mia]

I'm glad for that :)

[The Slayer]

I love this so much. This explains how I feel about a certain guy right now. Thank you for sharing

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Really? Good luck on you and him! Thanks, Slayer! :x

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This is VERY good. I greatly enjoyed! It is true to so many instances in life I think in the metaphorical sense; from addiction to the love we know is bad for us...the applications are endless.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I'm glad you enjoyed, Fabian. Thank you :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is a captivating free verse. I like the concept of the forbidden love here with the apt metaphors.
Nice nice, Kabayan. Keep it up!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I got the idea from Rizal's story. :) Thank you so much, Dhaye. Well-appreciated! :x

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Oh, yes. I remember it.
You're welcome. :)

[OTownPete]

Giving one's self over so completely can often times result in something worse than death...be very careful who you surrender to. Your friend in words, Pete

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

I'll take heed, Pete. Thank you for your sound advice. :x

[Ciara Di Salle]

This is gorgeous! You nailed free verse!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Ciara. I appreciate your comments very much! :x

[Sue]

This is a very good free verse poem Blue and I like the words too :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Sue! I'm glad to have you around. :)