Bittersweet Memory

For you "Dear Memory".

 

It was the first day at school

He dawdled for a while,

To grasp what was going on,

In midst of all those little people around

Bewildered

 

There he saw her standing,

Puzzled and petrified

With a running nose,

She had tearful eyes

Bleating

 

God must have chuckled,

Beholding them

They were so young and naive,

Tender as the glass

Fragile

 

Somebody blew the whistle,

Before they discerned anything

They were running, the impossible race

With their muddy shoes on their tiny legs

Scampered

 

As the years grew by,

They learned to dart steady

Taking hold of each other,

Hand in hand

Elated

 

Then slowly these cherubs,

Had grown wings of their own

Fluttered in different directions,

They moved on

Transcended

Such is the destiny,

Years later, they stumbled on each other

Stood awkwardly - mortified

Seeking veil to hide it

Astounded

 

They wanted to ask each other,

“How was it - the journey?

What did you see; were you happy?

Was it worth for you?”

Overwhelmed

 

Finally, their eyes meet like the first day at school

And those years that had passed, melted away

But the crowd; it pushed them apart - silently they drifted

And wondered would they ever see each other again

Farewell

 

(If you didn’t like the ending, read below)

 

 

Finally, their eyes meet like the first day at school

And those years that had passed, melted away

Old memories revived and it brought them closer

With tears in their eyes, they kissed each other

Amalgamated.

Reviews

[sanziwan]

HAhaa....alternative ending...Both is nice..but felt the 1st paragraph could be much better...Anyway I like ta way you write!!!!

[Randolf Ramos]

God will always give us a happy ending, He never play dice.

[A.Lee]

I liked both endings, but I think the first was a tad bit better because it was more realistic and harder hitting. Excellent feel and emotion in this. Great job.

[Immortal1967]

again very good...both endings were good, the first maybe a little more realistic, and in my opinion (just mine maybe) fit better...but awesome job on this one

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I like both endings but the first one you should keep, I think the poem reflects how certain people in our life are only temporary but serve the greatest purpose. Great story wrapped in poetic form.

[aloha.]

both ending are good but i prefer the first. this was so beautiful i almost cried. no kidding. you are very talented, dear.

[Gracie-San]

I like the first ending better, but that's maybe because I'm one for bittersweet endings.

Anyways, beautiful words that flowed beautifully! Great job. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like both endings. The first ending is the true one. The end of my High School time. We all wander off in different directions. But the memories will stay with us forever of being young and strong in hope and life. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

I like the bittersweet ending~ makes it all the more real~ thank you for this poetic journey through life of two~ loved the metaphors~

[Brad]

hahahahaha...i like the alternate ending to make all happy...i really enjoy reading your style, i catch myself speaking it out loud to myself