The Sorrows of a Broken Man

Confusion

Pain

Sorrow

Determination

Love

Happiness

 

My love for you is all-consuming

My determination to be with you is unstopable

My happiness is in our relationship

 

My confusion is towards your actions

My pain is crippling

My sorrow flows freely from my shattered heart

 

I seek refuge in your arms

I renew my spirit in your eyes

I numb at your touch

 

I stumble from the blow

I fall from the shock

I crawl from the fear

 

Your strike pierces me thoroughly

Your words break me completely

Your expresion tears me entirely

 

As I lay dying

My eyes seek yours

Only to find them cold

 

As my tears mingle with blood

I reach for you

You cringe from my touch

 

As I slip away

I plead for one last embrace

As you walk away from my broken body

 

My love seeps into the ground with my corpse

My determination leaves with my life

My happiness dies with me

 

My confusion decays

My sorrow withers

My pain fades

 

Happiness

Love

Determination

Sorrow

Pain

Confusion

Author's Note

ignore spelling and grammar errors.

Reviews

[Carrie Montgomery]

profound.
this cuts deeply..."I stumble from the blow...I fall from the shock...I crawl from the fear" this glaring sharpness, this hate after the expression of such deep love, it is quite the shock to the reader. The mixture of softness and harshness make for a perfectly emotional read. Well rounded, with the repetition of the opening stanza as a closing stanza...
although this is charged with emotion, it is smooth- flowing and has nice rhythm. Well done!

[Natasha Ashway]

Och! :-( It is so sad, and so real; the emotions that revolve around the love that is felt.
Thanks for sharing! Nice.

[Catastrophe]

this is going to be one of my favourites, just reading this poem
brought a thousand images to my head...your writing is beautiful.
And its sad, because my heart can relate...

[Alexander Fox]

UUUUMMMMM......dramatic much? Dude, THAT WAS INTENSE!!!!! Good poem, but you sure took it over the top. Hope things get better for you bro.
Peace(or war)