Night Sky

Paint the stars tonight, I'll be one of those someday. Layers of black, I fly so high. You are my chains, let go of me tonight.

Paint the stars tonight

just you and I

can you imagine the sight?

All the stars in the night sky

I'll be one of theose someday

I'll watch over you

Don't miss me when I'm away

I'm here regardless of what you do

Layers of black

I hope you aren't scared

of what they lack

it isn't like you cared

I fly so high

Don't try to catch me

I hear your sighs

but don't you see?

You are my chains

you keep me on the ground

I feel myself going insane

I feel you pulling me down

Let go of me tonight

right here, just you and I 

I'll show you the sight

of me, my soul in the night sky

Reviews

[Dante Carlisle]

This poem seems conflicted at its deepest level, but conflict breeds the best writing. There are times when whomever, or whatever, you are speaking to is loved, and others where you feel trapped by them. Must be about something you care about. Saying paint the stars implies that we are indeed the creators of the beauty in the night sky, and I love that usage. The message to close is great, absolutely beautiful thought. That should they let go and release their chains, they could experience the sight of you, free. This poem drives home the idea that only something that is truly free and uninhibited, can be beautiful. I enjoyed it, definitely gets me thinking.

[aranciata]

My original thought was actually either of someone who wanted to be "let go of" to die and watch over the person as a star and all that, or someone who had been so trapped by someone that they were caged and needed to be released to find their identity again.

Sometimes the free creature is more beautiful than the creature you kept captive at home.
Thank you for the review~
-Athena

[Dante Carlisle]

I enjoyed reading, so thank you.

[Mahlo Metsys]

I absolutely love the meaning behind this poem. Every line is very relevant and perfected to really put a bright light on the message. This is something I wish I had written myself.