It is Goodbye

It is Goodbye

A Poem by The dark story



Acold I lay on the lap of dreary earth
While Vulcan gripped you there alive.
Tears crawled on my face as fear on you,
Wondering why are we here tonight?



The Winds whispered our tale to me
As Mnemosyne casted a spell upon time
The buried dead Past then danced alive,
Bringing euphonious hopes and vibrant smiles.



The touch,the laugh, and the rosy promises
Adrift they went with the escape of your words.
Poor Mnemosyne mourned and melted away
As Oblivion swallowed his decayed prey.



While Vulcan feeds you with his flame,
I phrase the words you said to me
Now as I stand cold and denude,
"It is Goodbye" and there I bury you.



© 2016 The dark story



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This is a very stylised poem.....

One of the hardest things in life is to say goodbye to someone when they remain deeply enclosed within the heart. Such a painful event becomes magnified beyond measure depending on the reasons for the final goodbye.

What makes this poem stand out for me is the language and references to mythological entities; something i just wrote with in my latest poem.

A very delicate write. Very well worded and executed.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading it and for the uplifting review. Made my day :)



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Posted 9 Months Ago


I absolutely loved the references to mythology. A friend or lover gripped by flame. Perhaps even a hope or idea? Memories can make us dance. They can be a beautiful and brief escape. Though memories, once beautiful can become to us a fate like death. And it becomes time to say to the one gripped with rage/fire, "Good bye."

I liked this a lot. Unique in both language and references. Made me think. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


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I like they way you expressed your feelings with strong & bold words. The last line is amazing "It is Goodbye" and there I bury you.

Posted 10 Months Ago


You're a powerful writer! Bringing the reader in through cryptic words to a world full of meaning and stories, as well of course of emotion and imagery. I also enjoy your choice of words, perfect! Everything I say is true about this poem of yours as well. Tyfs!

Posted 10 Months Ago


The dark story

10 Months Ago

wow. Thank you so much for your kind words. Means a lot :)
Cyprian Van Dyke

10 Months Ago

You're most welcome :)
Goodbye to the past but welcome to great poetry and poets like yourself. So glad you are on this site. Awesome...:: :))))

Posted 10 Months Ago


The dark story

10 Months Ago

Haha thanks. Guess I an finally trying to grow up and work with more passion. It has been a long tim.. read more
Sami Khalil

10 Months Ago

Wow. Thank you kindly. You are welcome. ...:::;)))
There is something so mystical, so otherworldly in your thoughts, and in just moments one is carried to a place where Fire and Wind dance and play and fade into mists of morning dew. I sit here in the silences aching in the death cry of the word "Goodbye." xo

Posted 10 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

10 Months Ago

Your words just leave me dumbfounded everytime. Thank you so much for buying time and reading it :) .. read more
Goodbye, is indeed not something that is easily spoken. Often people try to avoid saying that word. This poem captures the very essence of the word. It is very well written.

I would love to see more.
~Res

Posted 10 Months Ago


The dark story

10 Months Ago

It's so delighting to see you stop by my work and read them. Thank you so much for your kind encoura.. read more
Terohime

10 Months Ago

anytime ^_^
interesting!
never read anything like this before. you might have a very deep knowledge 'bout history of greek. nice. liked it!

also, loved the part when you compared yourself "acold" winter, and him with "vulcan", the fire. quite captivating it is. you want him to remove your cold-ness, & embrace his fire overnight, perhaps, the damage's already done that can't be put back on mend. so it's quite worth sayin' "goodbyes". you buried him in memories, & walked on by his funeral of past-love. excellent work here!

captivating. historic. manifested. and a very intellectually perky look-like realistic poetry you get yourself "licked" in, as always. brilliant!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

11 Months Ago

Woah! Thank you so much for this wonderful review amd sharing your deep insight into the words. It's.. read more
This is a very stylised poem.....

One of the hardest things in life is to say goodbye to someone when they remain deeply enclosed within the heart. Such a painful event becomes magnified beyond measure depending on the reasons for the final goodbye.

What makes this poem stand out for me is the language and references to mythological entities; something i just wrote with in my latest poem.

A very delicate write. Very well worded and executed.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

11 Months Ago

Thank you so much for reading it and for the uplifting review. Made my day :)
Sometimes what we feel are goodbyes aren't just that 'cause it's a beginning of a new tomorrow.. We just have to read the signs.. I liked the use of good vocabulary in this poem.. Gives a nice feel to it without breaking the rhythm... Good job 👍

Posted 11 Months Ago


The dark story

11 Months Ago

The end has a new beginning. Thank you so much 😊
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

True.. You are welcome :)

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