Transmogrifying the numb world

it's horrifying to read the bloodbath battles in the history books & newspaper.but v know it's sorely breathtaking for those who actually face it.here are my feelings on the "war"

 

 

Transmogrifying the numb world

 

The Sky was crying to see the corpse,

And was berating the culprit’s soul

But those deaf men couldn’t hear those scolding

Instead they slay some more.

 

They call it “war”

A means to bring peace’

A means to win their nation

By slaying many innocent souls

And then seeking for some more.

 

 

I know my eyes couldn’t bear such a sight,

So I gazed at the firmament and heaved a sigh,

“OH! How worthless men have proved.” I thought He said when he roared.

 

I see my friends and brothers falling’

Their crying soul wailing….

Their dying heart praying….

Not for mercy…but for DEATH!!

‘cause who wants to live in a world where the land is being deified.

 

I’m calling out to their numb heart to give a beat,

But the cold soul is deaf…..and gone.

GONE?!...and left me alone to bear the venomous war.

 

NO! I can’t bear it.

Surely I can’t.

So can’t let it happen.

Can’t let anguish enshroud this world

Can’t let go innocence from this world.

 

I won’t die by those hands of butchers

Instead…I’ll rebel

‘cause they have no right to take my life.

They have no right to take others life.

 

 

I’ll transmogrify this numb world into the way it was,

And let these winds spread this message like a trotting horse.

So that others realize that we are not here to bear the injustice

But are a mere human which is the impeccable gift of God.

 

I know He’ll succor as He has done till now

All I ask is for just little favor from you all.

 

I’ll choose the paths of demons,

But my feet will never touch the ground.

Because I want to eradicate this path

 To make a world without lies…

 

Author's Note

this is my first shot...

Reviews

[khalid]

i really like it. i like the way you have written it. i hope politicians also can read it so they may think twice before they decide to share in a war..i dont think there can be a winner in a war..both sides fighting are losers because surely both sides have killed and injured persons..

[The dark story]

yes.i too want them to read it...but not just the politicians..i should say anyone who thinks that they could achieve peace via war....thanks for liking it..this was first attempt

[The dark story]

*my

[Nwang]

"To make a world without lies."
Loved this line. Very well written and excellent concept. The poem reminded me some what an anime called of Code Geass.

[TL Boehm]

to make a world without lies! Yes!

[Muhammad Qasim]

The flow is seriously awesome .. you cant stop reading once you start .. I'll chose the path of demon's .. great line!!

[The dark story]

thanks a lot for your humble compliments!!!!!!!!glad that you liked it that much:)

[Muhammad Qasim]

I am glad that u wrote such a beautiful piece .. that i liked so much .. so thank you

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I think this is a better part of your work, as it is more raw than your other pieces. The structure is well defined, which I always adore in a poem.
"I’ll transmogrify this numb world into the way it was,
And let these winds spread this message like a trotting horse." - That was the most hauntingly beautiful line of the entire write. Brilliant.

[The dark story]

i am sorely glad you liked it...this is my first shot....

[An owl on the moon]

What a poweful, moving poetry that drives deep into the heart and mind... How you've revealed the pain of the darkness, and breathed out a beautiful path to healing... A dance of dark and light in an amazing voice.

[The dark story]

thanks a lot for your kind reviews.i'm happy that you liked it!

[Irvette Dauphine]

really like it..
the way you write it.. what can i said.. yea awesome!
great job :)

[The dark story]

thanks a tonne!!!!!!!!!

[RachelReaper]

You sound a bit like Kira from the anime Death Note there at the end. Do you know that one? well, anywho, it was a great poem to read, it was very empowering.

[The dark story]

Endless sea told me about it recently but i haven't watched this anime.......you know.i wrote this quote when i was in class 8(when writing an essay).and now i consider it as my quote of life.well that's what always happens with me...when i made some animated drawing of my own imagination. someone told me i have copied it from some anime.when i was writing my first novel in class 8.my brother told me that i have taken the plot from some hindi movie "giza"(though i have never even heard its name)....anyway.thank you so much for liking my poem:D :)

[RachelReaper]

Don't get me wrong, I didn't say I thought you stole it from Death note. It's just that i know you like anime and it sounded a little death-notish, but I never thought you stole it from the book.

[The dark story]

:( :( aawwwwwww:( .....i didn't mean it..:( you said it "sounded" like death note....you didn't said"taken"..they are two different words with a different meaning...i didn't even thought like this........i am really sorry if you got me wrong.but i never mean it....sorry again:(

[RachelReaper]

nonono, its ok, i didn't mean to make you sad!!!! aiyeeeeee!!!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

History should be a lesson for us. So many people had died. I believe must defend borders but so much internal killing in countries. I will never understand the wars of today. In the Middle east. Brother killing brother. For what reason? Religion and oil/land had caused so much death. I like the thoughts create by the powerful poem. We need men of peace. Hard to find them today. I want a world where all children can seek education and happiness. Not learn to kill and lose their innocents to war. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[The dark story]

your thoughts are so true....i wish that they would realise it someday...iam glad u like it

[Renée]

It is a wonderful thought & a great message in your write !..no war..but until there are no power hungry humans left..there will always be violence...and no its never about bringing peace...

[The dark story]

thank u so much for you reviews....but did u mean that i come around with the fact that war is about bringing peace by sayg "and no its never about bringing peace... "

[Renée]

Iam sorry.. sometimes I have a hard time reading pieces with violence..right now I can't even find that line..

[The dark story]

oh...hahaha...it's okay...

[Brandon Mathis]

i like it a lot and what a perfect title for the poem, haha!!! p.s. check out my poems i think you would like them!!

[The dark story]

thank you so much.

[Brandon Mathis]

no problem