Hidden Hyde

Hidden Hyde

A Poem by audacious

This is the first I write of you
Just to show others a different view
Of how you treat me and how you spew
Words of hate and actions so rude. 

Most would write love and laughter,
But how is that possible when all that you're after
Is money, materials, and nothing that matters.

You're quick to judge but slow to realize
You're the hypocrite, sounding out wolf cries.
You care nothing of knowledge; you just sit by,
You don't push for future; you don't shoot for wise.

Me, I'm a comfort; a mother; a teacher
But for some reason I'm not good enough for the preacher
You seem to be, pointing out my "horrible" flawed features.

You could careless of genuine or true,
This is what comes of what you do
Just meaningless words that you'll never view
This is the first I write of you.


-A

© 2018 audacious



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This is awesome. I love the structure, the rhymes, the flow, the narrative! It's very well imagined and well constructed, especially with the nod at the end back to the beginning. The second line of the second triad is a tad iffy in musicality and "careless" I believe is supposed to say "care less". Other than those two minor factors, brava! Well done! Much enjoyed this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


I love the rhymes and the flow of the song.
maybe "horrid" flawed features?
otherwise i love it

Posted 4 Months Ago


Sometimes we're asleep at the switch and the awakening is way beyond traumatic...



Posted 4 Months Ago



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Added on January 14, 2018
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