An Unanswered Question

Some musings of mine that may, more or less, make no sense at all. :P

Now, here’s a question

One, which may not have an answer

But, I’ll ask away

Give me an honest confession

 

What do you long for?

 

What do I long for?

That is something better to ask

Do I want best friends?

Yes; but maybe there’s something more.

 

I long for something

But I do not know what it is

Do I long for life

That’s amazing and peachy-keen?

 

Yes, but no as well.

 

I want something fine

A ‘carbon copy’, so to speak,

Of those great stories

Yet, I want something that’s all mine

 

I may not make sense

Sorry, if I make your head spin

I’m really confused

Too, by the idea my mind presents

 

Is it possible

To make and write my own story?

Or, is it foolish

To think I can leap obstacles?

 

Obstacles that keep

Me, from being uniquely me

Can I write my own story?

Would I? The costs very steep

 

As life passes by

I wonder, is there something there

That can help me find

Something different that I can try?

 

I like what I see

In other people’s lives. But I

Think, do I want that?

Or, do I want something that’s me?

 

Yes, I want something

Honestly, either one will do

I just have to wonder

Which one would be more appealing?

 

A ‘carbon copy’

Of a completely amazing life?

Or, something unique

Something, that really defines me?

 

You honestly choose

Choose exactly what you long for

Be what you want to

You don’t have to wear other shoes.

 

As for me, I still

Don’t know. But, I’ll find it some day

I have to, you know

I will find it someday. I will.

Author's Note

I was thinking about this while I was out riding bikes with my family (I know, weird :p).

If this poem doesn't make sense to you, let me sum it up. Basically, what I'm trying to ask is which one do I want more? Do I want one of those completely perfect lives that everyone wants? Or, do I want something different, something that may not be perfect, but something that is still mine.

I still, honestly, don't know the answer to this, but I'm trying to find it. :)

Let me know what you think! Your personal opinions on the question in this are also appreciated.

Thanks!

Reviews

[Summer D.]

You go bike-riding too ? Awesome, I'm totally not alone. Maybe.. in the being forced to get up early in the morning sense.
This is really sort of ironic, because I just watched the " Pursuit Of Happiness " with Will Smith and his son Jaden ( A very young, young, young Jaden). It was sort of about this.


Easy enough to understand. I really like your source of inspiration and that you acted on it. A question, hm? Nice poem. I've always had a fear of imperfection as a writer. There'd be nothing left for me to do. If I was ' perfect ', life would seem less and less worth living for. Right?

Well done Allen. You have a unique writing style. The repetition of some of the lines added to the poem. Not perfect but good enough for me.

[AK]

Very nice poem! I'm really liking your style of writing. It is so nice:)

[Wren]

I think that you could compromise and have the perfect life that everybody wants, but still make it your own. I love how this poem is confusing as it reflects your thoughts on this topic. A great write:)

[Larry Dyson]

I think you know the answer but do not wish to let go of "the thought of perfection and what you believe it would bring"..it does not bring satisfaction because for that one has to be consumed in everyones "concept of perfection"ie. money, fame , love, a family.. that is just "numb karma-MAYA"illusion...reality for you and other artists is the" feeling "..of those things uniquely you..thoughts that are uniquely yours..and even more so expressing them in words and sharing them with others..only that will make you happy..i've read your stories.. they do that and will be very famous "..in the circle of your writing artist friends."IMHO

[Writingfox]

This makes perfect sense. I go through this every day. Especially as of late. Wonderful job as usual.

[SwagMaster]

This is a great write! I loved it.

[Miss Evans]

I really liked this one, it has the same feel I was trying to go for in some of my AmLit assignments (which I may or may not have constructed properly). Everyone wants something, even if they don't know what it is. Condition of man, I'd say.

Great poem, I like it.

[Rose of Gondor]

This piece made sense alright. It made me think. I want the one that may not be perfect, but is still mine. If there was truly perfection in this world (I don't think there is) it'd be too scary for me, even though to some it might be an improvement. My fear for "perfection" might also have come from reading Matched by Ally Condle :)

[~ Stefanie ~]

This piece made complete sense to me :) I think everyone struggles one way or another in life with these very same questions. What do we want in life? I personally want a life that I can call my very own, it doesn't need to be perfect, because i don't think there is a perfect life that exists out there. Everyone has a struggle or pain in life and there is no way to avoid that. I thought you expressed everything very well in this poem and asked some questions that really make the mind think and ponder on. Well done :)

[Mary C]

nicely penned