Perfect mess.

Perfect mess.

A Poem by Naomi Roseღ

  I wanna run inside
  my grave and die.

  I want to make it
  end.

  I don't want to see
  their faces,
  looking at me with
  hatred with every
  step I take. 

  I want to lay down
  in the bottom of the
  sea.

  I want to drown 
  in nothing and
  try to forget about
  everything you said. 

  But then I will
  wake up.

  And I will have
  to remember
  everything f*****g
  moment
  p e r f e c t l y. 

© 2011 Naomi Roseღ


Author's Note

Naomi Roseღ
I wrote this last year. I found it in my notebook.

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love the picture, and the title... this is strong, a lot of feeling in this released, awesome write

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this....filled with honesty...In the last stanza...everything f*****g moment ( was it meant to be that or every f*****g moment)...I got confused....but exceptional work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Life is fair. We must awake and face life again. I like the purpose of this poem. It was hard and to the point. A excellent ending to a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


You show a lot of courage in this poem...
not running away form those things that hurt.

Posted 12 Years Ago


It could use a little work but it has potential. I think everyone has felt this way before. Keep it up.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is great. I love it, I have felt this way before

Posted 12 Years Ago


Quite diabolical, but pleasant to my eyes and mind. Seems like you were very hurt at the time; you did a great job portraying it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Really good poem, we have to face so many unpleasant things in life and there is no escape. Beautifully put.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well written, but hard to read. I know the feeling, where you just want to forget, relax into nothingness. I'm impressed though, the way you express your self is generally simplistic in style/syntax, but your stuff hits hard. Its very real. Admirable.

Posted 12 Years Ago


It's really good, really deep. You're in touch with your emotions in this peice. I loved it.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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