Mind's Eye

No words here. Make of this one what you will. I wrote this puppy my freshman year of high school. Hope you enojy it.

The Mind’s Eye

 

Seen through the shadows,

Seen through the night,

Seen across the illumination

Of all unnatural lights.

Seen by the sinners,

Seen by the saints,

Seen by the blind

As a vivid shade of paint.

Seen during happiness,

Seen during hate,

Seen by the railings

Of a rusty mind’s gate.

Seen as an illusion,

Seen as the truth,

Seen as elementary

To an elementary sleuth.

Seen within the garden,

Seen within the fire,

Seen by all alike

As a forsaken desire.

Author's Note

Speak your piece, part in peace.

Reviews

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What a miraculous undertaking for someone so young...the rhythm and cadence are beautiful. Speaks volumes although I have never though of the Mind's Eye in such a way this is quite a vivid picture you paint with your words. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[IMOGEAN]

Great use of rhyme. Very good.

[Shelly Wiseberg]

Great piece I see and speak often from my mind's eye, a scorpio, poet, empath, wood/horse, 4 life path, 22 masterbuilder, and a nonconformist, I enjoyed this poem,Shelly

[Lia]

I really enjoyed this poem. Your wording was great. I love the "seen" as though so open, and in view of others. Thanks xx

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

good. Not my style because I usually really want my poems to be solid in their meaning so no one else can control it... wow, so I'm basically insabe. Anyway, I like dit but I didn't love it (pardon me for explaining the 'why').

The images could be great - but you don't aim it towards anything. The words could be powerful - but you don't focus that power. There's no subject here, as you said - "make of it what you will" and that's why the poem works so well with so little. But what I like about focused poems is that there is a punch line where the reader can suddenly match up with what the speaker is saying. Unfocused poems don't have that, so the punch is weaker for some readers. Still, it's great art because it is art. Thnaks for sharing and best fo luck :)