A BROKEN HEART's DESIRE

A BROKEN HEART's DESIRE

A Poem by Ayushi Beura
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Few desires of a friend who want to express this to her love...according to their complicated love story I wrote this poem.

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Clumsy, dull all around,
My whole world becomes dark when you are not found .
Shading tears from my eyes,
Tumbling down touching my lips,
Wanted to express ,
My strong desire of your presence .
But alas! It's a story of my poor heart ,
That I can't make you understand what I want.
Complaining and crying I am dying alone,
Silently recalling those beautiful days which are gone .
Nothing much I can express in my words ,
Just desire to be with you without being sad .
Near or far where ever you are,
You are always there in my heart ,
And my heart will only long for you,
Till death will make us apart .


© 2016 Ayushi Beura



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I can relate to this piece...
Really nice & I love the flow when I read it..
Each line depicting the desire :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Ayushi Beura

10 Months Ago

Thank you so much... :)
great poetry Ayushi!!! I wanna ask something...have u written dis poem on a single sided love??means for some man girl is just her friend but for that girl that particular man is her love..is dis sad story of a single sided love??

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Thank you....ummm it's a story of my friend, she is committed to a boy who cares for her earlier but.. read more
Love is the worse after its aftermath, when longing takes over and hurts more than anything. Then your desires begin to take over and you start wanting things which you would rather forget.
Fine piece of writing. Found it exceptional.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Glad that you liked it....Thank you so much
This is a common scenario, but you've described it in an uncommon way. Unique ways of expression make this different from the many similar messages written: "Clumsy, dull all around" . . . "Shading tears from my eyes" . . . "Complaining & crying I am dying alone." I just saw a reality TV show where this woman was constantly crying, which disgusted the guy she wanted & she was totally incapable of telling him what she really wanted & needed from him. It reminds me of your message. Sometimes we just cry in our frustration, in our inability to make ourselves heard. This is the strongest part of your message. The last four lines aren't as original-sounding, as these are things often written -- cliché.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your review...
A love gone awry. You have written this for a friend but I am sure it is the story of many people's life.
Very nicely penned.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much
Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

You Are Welcome
And this is even more delightful one Ayushi... Much relatable to me....
The rhymes flow so delicately that one gets lost !!!
I'm speechless of this work and one more thing, I think "shading " should be replaced with "shedding"...
that's all... u made my day...
thanks for sharing such an amazing poetry....
I wish your friend finds a better way to be happy....

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

So kind of you...thanks
"complaining and crying i am dying alone,
silently recalling those beautiful days which are gone... "

these lines're way fascinating. intellectual. and so realistic. i am sure can relate to it esp. when im being or so overwhelmed with gone days of blown memories. very nicely licked. i kinda love how slightly you get ur poetic self stripped down in such escorted words. very well, sugar. kinda enjoy reading u. reading u is seemed more like understanding how common the world is and how similar each of everyone are esp. when it comes to love. captivating theme here.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much you took time and read my poem, "Thanks" seems so small to reply your kindness:D :.. read more
Adams

1 Year Ago

really? then don't say so-called "Thanks". umm.. can we have some coffee then? (kidding) lol
This is very heartfelt. Heartbreak is indeed very painful. Nicely written. Keep writing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review
It was pen beautifully ...it is sad when a love doesn't work out when one means so much to another. What was lost can be found again in another if the heart is willing too. :) Larry

Posted 1 Year Ago


Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

You are absolutely right...if one will always DESIRE for love and the other will just ignore, the bo.. read more
onceloved

1 Year Ago

some might not think love is a 24/7 job it is it is the most beautiful one can have! :) Larry
Ayushi Beura

1 Year Ago

True:) :) :)

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