If you meet my boyfriend

If you meet my boyfriend tell him I tried

I put up with so much and yet he still lied

Every time he hurt me, a bit of me died

So please, if you meet my boyfriend tell him I’m tired

If you meet my boyfriend tell him I’m in pain

It was always about him, always what he would gain

Never considering my heart and it drove me insane

If you meet my boyfriend tell him my tears are pouring like rain

If you meet my boyfriend tell him we just don’t belong

He is an amazing person but works much better alone

Even though I want to stay, my heart knows I have to move on

If you meet my boyfriend please tell him I’m gone

Reviews

[Emrick]

I love the title,the theme and the ryhmes.
Its a cool poem.

[julz]

thanks

[oxo]

it is smooth. for me, it's read-and-relax poem: there's no need to think hard about what you want to say and impart. very simple and straight to the point. nice work. :)

[julz]

thanks :-)

[Pradeep Nair]

it falls in the category of "Message Poem", practiced long back in my mother tongue.

"Every time he hurt me, a bit of me died"- the realism is at its heights here.
"f you meet my boyfriend tell him my tears are pouring like rain"- simile at its best.

In total... this work is really superb.

Expecting a lot more.
Thanks for posting this.

[julz]

:-) more coming up.

[Pradeep Nair]

waiting eagerly

[Sir Jaykom]

Not too emotional but deep enough to express your feeling about the relationship adequately. You painted a good picture with the words and the rhymes. Thanks for sharing!

[julz]

you are welcome ... thanks for reading too :-)

[YourMajesty2102]

I like this! It reminds me of how I felt with my ex boyfriend... I actually wrote a poem about it(Destruction)! Even though It kills you to move on, but once you have you are so much stronger! I have actually discovered that I didn't need him Ever and I am more myself without him! Nice work! Keep up the good work!

[julz]

yea, it's so easy to pour out how you really feel in a poem. Thanks for the review...is Destruction on ur page? wanna read it :-)

[YourMajesty2102]

Sure is!

[Gideon]

nice work. i certainly would tell him all that if i meet him. a wonder work it is. however, try add a little imagery and passion. let it flow from deep within you. do not hold it back when it flows. go all the way inside of you and from there, pour it all out

[julz]

thanks for the review :-)