Stolen Moment

i did not notice when
    the darkness of our night gave way
    to gray dawn,
     to shadows,
         to sight
     i just realized that I could trace…

…well…

the shadows frame you perfectly,
       anyway
     and the curve of your form draws my eyes
           shamelessly

if only
     i could stop smiling, dreaming
       or
maybe
     i could just stay here in this quiet,
               within the gray softness that is your arm-
except it’s cold
     and my mind is restless ---

please do not take it amiss when
     i wake you briskly,
             instead of lingering,
but i cannot fall prey to this spell-
    to you, to the gray dawn,
        to the feeling fluttering in my chest

so wake up, lover,
     open your eyes and glare if you must
        and walk with me through the brightening morning
            and i shall smile,
        holding this moment,
             the beat of your heart, the feel of your arms,
                 the warmth of your breath on my neck,
                 of your chest against my back
        to myself
until reality again steals it away

Reviews

[Karen Raquepo]

I like the impact in this poem.Stolen moment may seem to smile,but there's no better,than to live in actual.

[La Belle Musical]

Wow. This is ended one of the finner love-ish poems I've read in a while. I loved how you spaced it and the format was absolutly perfect for it. A few things to watch out for are your i's. Always capitalize them. Other than that, I don't have much else to say.

"the shadows frame you perfectly,
anyway
and the curve of your form draws my eyes
shamelessly"

I loved this bit - excellent. Good job and keep at it!

[Melissa]

now isn't that what everyone wants?