Letting Go

They fight like they've never loved
His harsh words sliced through her tender heart
With each word that rolled off his tongue, she sunk deeper and deeper
until she reached the bottom
As she struggled for air to tell him she loves him one last time
His words beat down on her
Down, down
and she finally let go

Reviews

[FaeryQueen]

this poems is gooooooooooooooooooooooooooaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaals!!!!

[Red3Bravo]

Verbal abuse sucks. I like your opening line. I think your structure could benefit from a bit more line control. Lines 3 and 5 in particular could benefit from some additional line breaks. A tragic subject well handled.

[Nicholas C. Cook]

I really liked this Bailey. An all to familiar tale in relationships gone wrong, where the one partner or both still love each other but for their own sanity have to let go.

[andrew mitchell]

A powerful sad write that depicts violence against women

[terry smith]

Wow!! a deep sadness must have provoked this. Very well done!

[Bailey Bradish]

Thank you so much! It's actually something my teacher assigned us to do was to take cliche similies and recreate them into something different and build a poem around it. Mine for instance was, "they fight like cats and dogs. "

[terry smith]

I hope you got an a 'cause you deserve one!