Feelin' Righteous

Feelin' Righteous

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by Paul Bell's "Time"

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Haughty busybodies
looking in from the outside
feel pity on her sad measly life.
Imagine spreading her supple thighs
for some never-ending queue of
sweating grunting rich slobs!
All for the love of glam and bling!
Others shudder at the thought of her
tight youthful tummy being flattened
by an array of flabby hairy old bellies.
Feelin’ righteous
they shake their heads.

A case of mistaken perception . . .
the true affliction here is
needing to be needed.

After the initial thrills of taking risks
flirting with danger and
being hooked on her natural mania . . .
she’s fueled by pretend-rape scenarios
that summon her childhood abuse . . .
trying not to notice the guilt and shame
of enjoying bad treatment so much.
Finally she gets to the savored moments.
After the fireworks he came in for
she gently nudges his expectations.

Each time it never fails.
He pours out his authentic heart
feeling her authentic acceptance.
He spills secrets nobody else knows.
She needs to feel needed and
thrives on a sense of power.
Feelin’ righteous!
This spontaneous connection
is the part she lives for . . .
it’s never about love . . .
it’s a mutual momentary lifeline.

Crisp bills and gift-wrapped bling
along with her two-hundredth pair
of glittering strappy spiked heels . . .
all this junk piles up on
the floor beside the bed . . .
piles of detritus collecting
along the edges of jagged lives.




© 2017 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
Paul's poem that inspired me:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Paul5758/1917568/

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i kept thinking of Marilyn Monroe while reading .. but your poem is pretty universal for those abused ... particularly sexually ... that saddest of all the tale .."She needs to feel needed and
thrives on a sense of power." .. as she gets use to it. :( well said ..not a thought came to mind of changing anything about it .. easy flow, held my attention all the way, significant social commentary ... closing so empty a scene .. piled with "stuff"
E.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Even tho I've never been a hooker, I've had sex for all the wrong reasons after having my self-estee.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

:( .......................



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i kept thinking of Marilyn Monroe while reading .. but your poem is pretty universal for those abused ... particularly sexually ... that saddest of all the tale .."She needs to feel needed and
thrives on a sense of power." .. as she gets use to it. :( well said ..not a thought came to mind of changing anything about it .. easy flow, held my attention all the way, significant social commentary ... closing so empty a scene .. piled with "stuff"
E.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Even tho I've never been a hooker, I've had sex for all the wrong reasons after having my self-estee.. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

:( .......................
I loved this so much!

You chose your words wisely, keep writing more.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Thanks so much for your enthusiastic response! (((HUGS)))
Humanity full of so many flaws and foibles. Judging women always more harshly.

I like this turn around. The exchange of power. The mutual needs met in so many unexpected ways.

The need to connect however flawed.

Posted 5 Months Ago


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barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Here's the line (of yours) that sums it up perfectly: "The need to connect however flawed" . . .this.. read more
maybe jagged lives can only get temporary relief...the past follows too closely behind...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

I like it! Your point of view is always enlightening & thanks for sharing it! (((HUGS)))
As stark as some peoples lives get. I kept hearing the song 'Where do you go to?' by Peter Sarstedt in my head as I read this for some reason.
There is a hint of understanding here and that seasons the whole mix. This is life undiluted and contemporary. And who is to say it is not real?
A compassionate write.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Thank you for hashing over my attempts here in your usually interesting & original way! *smile* Now .. read more
Wow. This is powerful and almost frightening in its portrayal. There is compassion for the used and contempt for the user, - but wait... is there also a hint of understanding for the needs of both. ?Neither is pretty, yet desired.
A departure from the rural idylls that have became your trademark recently . This is nature in the raw. (((Hugs)))

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barleygirl

5 Months Ago

To tell you the truth, my overriding urge is to write a continuous flow of rants about the mess in o.. read more
You portray this perfectly Margie. You always think it's about sex. And i always thought it was about sex.
But in talking to a nice girl who offered services. I was surprised when she told me, it isn't. Six out of ten clients want to talk and be seen with a gorgeous girl. Two will want services which doesn't involve sex initially. Two will want sex. In a strange way. It is really life in the raw.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

I like hearing about your impressions on this topic. This is true of so much in life, people engagin.. read more

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