First Taste

First Taste

A Poem by barleygirl
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picture = my first ripe berry this spring

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I confess I’ve been a gluttonous foodie
missing munchies would make me moody
but a bouncing belly feels so broody
I decided to lighten up on being a foodie.

Gradually I learned to avoid extremes
dreading the agony of busting my seams
now I’ve learned that patience redeems
so I await the moment eagerness teems.

These days I dream of that perfect bite
if it takes a long time that’ll be all right
following my fantasy like a guiding light
a tiny flavor burst can be a fresh delight.

Lately my young berries slowly turn red
bright imagined sweetness fills my head
blue jay stand back or catch some lead
my anticipation is wildly widespread.

Now I live for this time of year
when each juicy morsel is oh-so-near
for my flourishing garden gophers veer
but I call dibs on each first nibble here!




© 2017 barleygirl



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N.
Such a elegant way of writing about delayed gratification. " Now, I live", I love this because self control comes from having something bigger to live for than just satiating carnal needs. Your piece captures the transition of a person living to eat from a person who eat to live. It also very realistic of the struggles we have with food especially in the land of plenty know as America. N

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

This is an astonishing analysis of my message! You're the only person who peered deeper into my mean.. read more
N.

4 Months Ago

You're most welcome.



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Berries.. all kinds are so succulent. And delicious ...your poem was a delightful read.. now I have a craving for some fresh fruit.. nice work..

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

My berries are pumping out the pink now! *wink! wink!* Next I'm salivating over the tomatoes, waitin.. read more
I love how you touched on the importance of not over indulging in this lighthearted little gem and then described some of the delights of summer. You really have a touch for feel good writing. It's a joy to read your poetry. :) Julie

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Believe me, there are plenty of gripes inside my head, particularly of the political kind. But I wor.. read more
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N.
Such a elegant way of writing about delayed gratification. " Now, I live", I love this because self control comes from having something bigger to live for than just satiating carnal needs. Your piece captures the transition of a person living to eat from a person who eat to live. It also very realistic of the struggles we have with food especially in the land of plenty know as America. N

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Months Ago

This is an astonishing analysis of my message! You're the only person who peered deeper into my mean.. read more
N.

4 Months Ago

You're most welcome.
such a soft, lighthearted poem is refreshing in the midst of all these agonizingly depressing poems about abuse and failed love. Reading this does call to mind the joyful feeling of having a sweet treat. My favorite being reese's peanut butter cups. I would like to say, though, some of the lines feel a bit disjointed. For example, the line "a tiny flavor burst can be a fresh delight." doesn't relate to the rest of the stanza, in my opinion. So some of these lines seem to come out of nowhere. Not that I didn't enjoy the poem, because I did :)

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Yes, I can see that disjointed thing that you refer to. I tend to be a rhyming addict, so my message.. read more
Wow, I just had my lunch break, but reading this is making me yearn to the days, in which we could go to a place in my neighborhood, where all along a fence, there was a raspberry bush, and each year, us kids would fight to be the first to run and try of its fruits. Lovely written. Thank you for allowing me a glimpse into a forgotten memory indeed.

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Those precious childhood memories are the best! I loved hearing about yours! There's something very .. read more
Maria

4 Months Ago

You are right indeed. Enjoy your writing, its so vivid and so realistic...makes me hungry...
I love the playful tone in this one! Seeing as it's the fasting month for us Muslims, this is a perfect read for me atm :)) I'm one of a kind who loves to eat but idk how to cook :p
Lovely write, BG!:)

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Very interesting! I don't think I've read anything about how it might feel to be celebrating Ramadan.. read more
Dr. YumnaKay

4 Months Ago

the bliss of not eating is kinda satisfying. I mean you can go on doing your work for hours at a tim.. read more
Between your berries and the poem, it is difficult which one is more beautiful. I am also on the same side of fence. Loving everything edible and having to be careful about everything I eat,a difficult feat awaits me every day. Your poem brings it all out.
Beautifully penned! The third and fourth sections take me on a trip with you. I loved this one.
Thank you for sharing.

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

My weakness is sweets, but there's no comparison between something fresh & sweet like berries, or a .. read more
So you were eating all the pies, Margie.
Now you're collecting all this healthy fruit in the pursuit of eternal life. Now tell me. Do the little animals turn up at your door for the juicy morsels.
Once eat an apple with a bottle of whisky. Someone told me it was a hangover cure. It is, as long as you don't drink the whisky. lol

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

With my food struggles, it's a good thing I never had to fight with an addiction to alcohol! *smile*.. read more
Isn't it a delight to enjoy those fresh fruits. I'm with you cherries, blue berries, peaches - yes bring them on! Ahhh, but in moderation - hmmm.

Nicely done.

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

I don't think there's a need for moderation when it comes to fresh fruit & veggies! I'm only saying .. read more
Dave

4 Months Ago

Okay - I concede. Yum yum I love fruits too.
Food is lovely and to be enjoyed. All things in moderation
Lovely poem.https://tse2.mm.bing.net/th?id=OIP.Ws5PLyFNwXgK7V6eoY7rMwEsDQ&w=282&h=196&c=7&qlt=90&o=4&pid=1.7

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barleygirl

4 Months Ago

Thanks for your thoughtful read & share! I'm a firm believer of the "moderation" rule! *smile* (((HU.. read more

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