Enchanted Enclave

Enchanted Enclave

A Poem by barleygirl
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Dare to penetrate my rustic enclave
captivated within, I’ll kiss what I crave
I melt to the tending of my devoted slave
he impishly dallies within my charmed cave.

Oh don’t bother with the folly of clothes
the enchanted caterpillar already knows
I’ll braille your naked flesh like prose
our wafting scents sing us into throes.

Ravish me roughly against granite rocks
moans bounce a breeze all through the boondocks
we’re tormenting thermals like hustling hawks
until I’m saucily squirming atop my silver fox.

Let’s hide out forever in our beguiled grotto
as your convincing tongue ignites my glow
we refuse to join the senseless freak show
no, let’s just coax a fire to illumine each indigo.




© 2017 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
I snapped this photo of an enchanted spot across the creek and up the ridge from my place . . . then I was inspired to write about it *smile*

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Thank goodness the weekend's due and I'll have time to recover, you - YOU!

Okay, so i've done the coy bit. Now to say, that I've always found your writing to have deft touches that take readers left of centre.. more or less! Here you've used free fall language and taken one's imagination into wild, raw territory.

And then what happened?

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

YOU (my pretty) are squarely to blame for my writing starting to take wings & go wonky wild girl! Wh.. read more
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emmajoy

3 Months Ago

Oh you love! What a fantastic reaction to my few words!. Your extraordinary explanation would make.. read more



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nice alliteration splashed throughout this oh so passionate poem. each phrase expressed with a raw natural element of nature blended with sensual tones paints a vibrant scene in this piece.. nice work..

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Coming from a great poet like you, I take this as a great compliment! *smile* Thanks for stopping by.. read more
  Fran Marie

3 Months Ago

You're welcome
"...I’ll braille your naked flesh like prose"
"...we’re tormenting thermals like hustling hawks"

Brilliant lines that positively cement this piece as a literary gem. I bow to the mind that generated this.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Lines like that are an amazing gift . . . more than thinking about what I'm going to write, I just t.. read more
Some very beautiful, very unique and very imaginative art charms are sprawled all over this enchanting write. No doubt you have cast a word spell on us this time.
The tickling imagery, the spicy alliteration have left me in an awed state. It seems you have enjoyed a lot writing this. I loved the playfulness of your pen.
A master stroke from a master of words !
You really rock in this craft, Margie. The beauty of the write has taken me totally in and I am list somewhere.
Thank you for penning this.


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your eloquent words! I loved the way you said all that! When I was under 10 yr.. read more
Bala Gorthi

3 Months Ago

Loving and looking at the nature that way at that age is something that is not common. I would and s.. read more
barleygirl

3 Months Ago

You have such a beautiful way of looking at things! Very inspiring to be friends & share ideas with .. read more
WOW, nature inspired this much passion and urgency? The lines drip with sensuality! Loved the alliteration of "saucily squirming!" and "ravish me roughly!" Quite the passionate picture you paint here. Great one, Margie! Lydi**

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

While in my usual barren mode out here in the boondocks, I usually get ALL my sexy inspiration from .. read more
Lydia

3 Months Ago

Whatever the inspiration, it was certainly a good one. Quite the compliment to have someone look yo.. read more
Sensuous scenery, sexual similes, suggestive speculation, simply stunning. ( but more prosaically ............Grrrr). * Nudge! nudge!*





Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

As I mentioned to you in a message, I was in contact with an old friend from high school after 44 ye.. read more
I see that we share this absurd affection for alliteration...'tis a menace, a malady so mischievous and maddening!!! I really loved the poem! It has a nice whimsical tone, and the imagery is excellent! My favourite lines are:
"I’ll braille your naked flesh like prose
our wafting scents sing us into throes."

Great writing! :))

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your enthusiastic review! I do love a good spot of alliteration, that's for su.. read more
This poem is wonderfully brazen and reckless. The, descriptions are humorously fearless and out there that I couldn't help but laugh while reading. Nature is the world's greatest stimulant, so it would seem.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I have to confess, I've done a fair bit of romping in the hills with virile young studs, back in my .. read more
Wow, this read put a smile on my face. You are a master with words and imagery here. This has a feeling of calm spirit and rebellion at the same time. Rock on

Sheer Terror

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your awesome comments. I'm just getting started in my life, even tho I turn .. read more
Someone who throws caution to the wind will always have my blessing.

Regards,
Al

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I've been alone all my life & I'm turning 61 tomorrow . . . just to give you some context . . . so I.. read more
some hot stuff the bewitching has swept me up ...and that photo is so cool!! almost unreal in its magic ..you are one lucky cave babe my friend ;)))
E.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I've looked at this slope a million times, but suddenly I saw the little enclave & took a photo. The.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

ahahaha oh the sacrifices one is put through in order to create ...no wonder suffering is integral t.. read more

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