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Did He Notice?

Did He Notice?

A Poem by barleygirl
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true story . . .

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This autumn skipped ahead to a frisky brisk
my crockpot’s bubbling a thick squash bisque
pardon this pause in our bracing fall days
as Father Sun sets the sycamores ablaze.

This late Indian Summer crept up on me
swapping hot coffee for a lemon sun tea
gradually the fervor began to penetrate
as a mellow fellow stood at my front gate.

Offering his thanks with a careless hug
my insides fired up a mean jitterbug
barely grasping the gentle of his touch
my thermostat clearly popped its clutch.

I couldn’t tell if it was sizzling or chilly
goosebumps swept my spine all willy-nilly
as fiery flashes painted red splashes
my mind traversed some wicked whiplashes.

I gasped when he offered a dinner invite
my vision periphery turned frosty white
lavender emanated with scented lotus
can’t help but wonder: Did he notice?




© 2017 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
Indian Summer = a late heat spell in autumn
Yesterday it got up to 105*F (40*C) here, but I didn't even notice the blistering heat as I was standing at my gate being invited to dinner for the first time in about five years . . .

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Hi there, this was a fun read. Mixing whimsical with serious emotion going on here, magical! I have no criticism of this piece because I am not a poet, but you are! I just realized if ever I need a smile, your page and writings will be my go to! Thanks for sharing!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

8 Months Ago

I just realized I had not answered this review . . . always enjoy hearing from you! (((HUGS))) Fondl.. read more



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A hot autumn Day Indian summer sure inactive and on the prow your only be hot for a little while the temperature will droop at night chilling the air on a long autumn night.

Posted 8 Months Ago


Hi there, this was a fun read. Mixing whimsical with serious emotion going on here, magical! I have no criticism of this piece because I am not a poet, but you are! I just realized if ever I need a smile, your page and writings will be my go to! Thanks for sharing!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

8 Months Ago

I just realized I had not answered this review . . . always enjoy hearing from you! (((HUGS))) Fondl.. read more
First. What's a crockpot.
Second. Guys just come to your gate and ask you out. Love it. The last time I did that. I got chased by some madman with a shotgun. You get out there girl and kick a*s. I mean enjoy yourself.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

A crockpot? You really don't know? It's a slow cooker used to cook soups & stews all day long. Can y.. read more
Paul Bell

9 Months Ago

Must admit Margie. Don't think my local Mcdonalds uses a crockpot. But I'm going to ask them anyway... read more
Intensely Awakened, Stirred Passion

Awesome Read

Matthew

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your sweet appreciation. Unfortunately this situation has fizzled already, but.. read more
Matthew Kult

9 Months Ago

Boo, His loss

Matthew
The way you weave words to form poetic lines..... I'm left in awe.....

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your enthusiastic comments! I have to give all the credit to: "practice"!!! *s.. read more
anonymous_at

9 Months Ago

you are welcome....:)
-A-
i love this, this was beautifully written!

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review my poems!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Thank you for your kind words. Sorry I haven't gotten to reading you yet . . . I've had a bad week b.. read more
Darn it!! I've got a rival. - but I'll be back. (See PM)
Norm. (((Hugs)))

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Ah ha! Very funny! If I have to share you with Trish, then turn-about is fair play! *wink! wink!* I .. read more
How wonderful! I hope you have a wonderful dinner with this mystery person and I am quite sure he DID notice! As always, the rhyming and imagery is stunning. I especially liked, "Father Sun sets the sycamores ablaze." Glorious! Lydi**

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I very much enjoyed my first date in about two years! Thanks for your fun comments (((HUGS))) Fondly.. read more
I love the rhyming, the metre, and the visuals that are inspired from your words. There is so much in here that I am drawn to reading it several times just so I do not miss anything. Bravo! A wonderful poem about a wonderful event in a person's life. I do hope the next dinner invitation does not take another five years to come. :)

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Now that the door has been broken down, this guy would feed me every night if I let him. But I've be.. read more
I bet he did.
"I gasped when he offered a dinner invite
my vision periphery turned frosty white
lavender emanated with scented lotus
can’t help but wonder: Did he notice?"
I did like the complete poem. The above lines I liked. Always good to close with a question. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

We had a very enjoyable dinner, but as always, the guy is much more hungry for companionship than I .. read more
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

A fun tale to read my friend.

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