Did He Notice?

Did He Notice?

A Poem by barleygirl
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true story . . .

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This autumn skipped ahead to a frisky brisk
my crockpot’s bubbling a thick squash bisque
pardon this pause in our bracing fall days
as Father Sun sets the sycamores ablaze.

This late Indian Summer crept up on me
swapping hot coffee for a lemon sun tea
gradually the fervor began to penetrate
as a mellow fellow stood at my front gate.

Offering his thanks with a careless hug
my insides fired up a mean jitterbug
barely grasping the gentle of his touch
my thermostat clearly popped its clutch.

I couldn’t tell if it was sizzling or chilly
goosebumps swept my spine all willy-nilly
as fiery flashes painted red splashes
my mind traversed some wicked whiplashes.

I gasped when he offered a dinner invite
my vision periphery turned frosty white
lavender emanated with scented lotus
can’t help but wonder: Did he notice?




© 2017 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
Indian Summer = a late heat spell in autumn
Yesterday it got up to 105*F (40*C) here, but I didn't even notice the blistering heat as I was standing at my gate being invited to dinner for the first time in about five years . . .

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Hi there, this was a fun read. Mixing whimsical with serious emotion going on here, magical! I have no criticism of this piece because I am not a poet, but you are! I just realized if ever I need a smile, your page and writings will be my go to! Thanks for sharing!!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I just realized I had not answered this review . . . always enjoy hearing from you! (((HUGS))) Fondl.. read more



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Yes! This is amazing :) I love it! I really love the imagery of the poem, I can almost feel the warmth!

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

Thank you for the most awesome heartfelt feedback! I'm smiling from ear to ear! Fondly, Margie
Dinner revealed in a voice thick in kindness. What's for desert?

Regards,
Al

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I'm sure he could've been easily coaxed into dessert, but I decided to keep it simple. I didn't make.. read more
Omg this is so good.😍😱 I love it. This is way better than any piece of writing I've ever written in my life.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I've been practicing for about 40 years, so you've still got time to get better, too! *wink! wink!* .. read more
Zoey

10 Months Ago

Thanks that's helpful
It is amazing how some days can be so special :) Your words took me to the place where all this majestically happened, and I couldn't help myself get off from that wonderland, before I read the last words of your poem, "Did he notice?"
Undoubtedly, he sure, did notice 😊...Make yourself believe that he did! *Smile*

It is always a happy feeling to know.about such happiness stepping in a friend's life😊 hope you have a great time, and a delicious dinnerry night😉😊

Much love to you dear aunt-friend 😊
((((HUGS))))

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

We had Mexican food & the salsa was a little hot, put some sweat on my brow, maybe it was something .. read more
Saumya

10 Months Ago

That's Great!😊
And oho, good going dear aunt-friend! I'm very happy for the good things ha.. read more
What a delicious offering we have here, all wrapped up in an autumnal hue. Anyway, enough of prose, lets keep our fingers crossed there are no cons. I'm sure he did Margie, no doubt at all. An Indian Summer in more ways than one so to speak or write. I darn well hope you accept and have a swell time, your friend, N

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

This is someone local I've known about 2 years, so there was no danger or anything unknown about it... read more
Neville Pettitt

10 Months Ago

Hey, dont kid yourself, he eventually got there. He sounds like a boondock kind of guy & should be m.. read more
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Gee
Did you accept, huh, course ya did.....behave Miss B, if not wear clean drawers.
The usual well written enjoyable fayre

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

At my advanced age, I take the time to savor each little morsel for a few months before I get to the.. read more
Gee

10 Months Ago

Don’t chew to long ya teeth might fall out...
barleygirl

10 Months Ago

That's a "guy" point of view for sure!
Love the wording choice and I loved the imagery.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

Thanks for stopping by to share a fun moment with me! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Your poetic account unfolds so tenderly, through the warmth of the world both inside and out. And I saw your note as well, and saw how the day colored your canvas with a sweet joy. Made me smile to sense it all unfolding for you there, and I lift my glass to you now. Cheers! :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

Not much excitement occurs out here in the boondocks, so I gotta document each little joy & surprise.. read more
An owl on the moon

10 Months Ago

Ah, I expect a poetic soul in the bookdocks to shake spring from every stone. (((Hugs))) :)
This is so cutely written. You get the sense of the Indian Summer from the pace of the poem, like there is a lot happening at once and all very quickly. This was a lot of fun to read.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I love hearing your interpretation, which brings in all sorts of things I never even thought about w.. read more
I'm sure he noticed! I believe a guy always notices when a woman embraces him with her heart.

Take care - Dave

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I shared this poem with him at our first dinner & he said he noticed! *wink! wink!* I love your answ.. read more
Dave

10 Months Ago

I'm very happy for you. You strike me as a person who appreciates the love she gets and is so willi.. read more

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