Becoming Authentic

Becoming Authentic

A Poem by barleygirl
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just for fun . . .

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We all think we got there lickety-split
nobody deems oneself a bit counterfeit
unintentional fakery we humbly submit
must be a myth that simply doesn’t fit.

Not likely amongst those carefully kept
or anyone with a spirit that’s never leapt
lest careful confines be madly overstepped
while expectations are wildly windswept.

It takes all one’s life to become truly real
thick protective layers that take years to peel
realizing our assumptions are no big deal
and there’s no such thing as a heart of steel.

All former freakishness don’t matter at all
whether curvy or lithe, squatty or tall
nobody needs a comprehensive overhaul
as soon as we see we’re each an oddball.

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Inspired by a passage from the book: Velveteen Rabbit . . .

He said, "You become. It takes a long time. That's why it doesn't happen often to people who break easily, or have sharp edges, or who have to be carefully kept. Generally, by the time you are Real, most of your hair has been loved off, and your eyes drop out, and you get loose in the joints and very shabby. But these things don't matter at all, because once you are Real, you can't be ugly, except to people who don't understand."



© 2017 barleygirl



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Very Good Poetry from my point of view I'm to old to worry about what people think of me today someday you whole life will be in a memory keg we will sit around with friends and have a beer on my of course its my time to buy all friends welcome remove the Mask not surprise.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I don't much enjoy my painful carcass (fibromyalgia & neck injury) but other than that, I wouldn't t.. read more



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I can't make myself rhyme like this.
I lose patience,
at least in my analysis.
Growing old is simply a process,
constantly creating yourself,
formed from a life full of nonsense.
Enjoyed your write,
and wish you a pleasant good night.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Excellent job writing your reply in verse! I love it! Your sensible simplicity far exceeds my scramb.. read more
as a young adult this is very inspiring as I am on my way tolearning things like this about life. i lke that in all of your pieces you show off an extensive vocabulary you express thoughts without repeat of words I'm working on that skill.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

My dad was into vocabulary, like a walking dictionary, I could ask him about any word & he would tel.. read more
RBrmdz

9 Months Ago

Thats a great way to start with the kids. I have 3 young children under 8 we read alot. Im an avid r.. read more
barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Never having had kids, I'm at a disadvantage becuz I didn't read any fairy tales, a good example in .. read more
Very Good Poetry from my point of view I'm to old to worry about what people think of me today someday you whole life will be in a memory keg we will sit around with friends and have a beer on my of course its my time to buy all friends welcome remove the Mask not surprise.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I don't much enjoy my painful carcass (fibromyalgia & neck injury) but other than that, I wouldn't t.. read more
I agree my friend.
"But these things don't matter at all, because once you are Real, you can't be ugly, except to people who don't understand."
Beauty is one less weight in old age. I believe old faces have great beauty. They tell stories and you can see their strength in their faces. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote




Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I am much more enamored by the gray & wrinkled faces of my heroes (such as Eric Clapton & Paul Newma.. read more
Coyote Poetry

9 Months Ago

I agree. Old faces tell a thousand stories.
I must start saying, how absolutely truthful this is. But, well, coming from you, I could not expect less....lol... I ENJOYED so much, at times I smile (right from the beginning... :-) ...Then I laughed )at the end) And what a wonderful way to finish a reading...laughing. You are not great in this one...you are Magnificent!!!
And the passage from the Velveteen Rabbit? As truthful and accurate as your poem!!
Stay happy Dear Margie...Kisses on your cheeks for this one, because it is making me go to bed smiling or and: laughing!!!!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Your delightful words put a smile on my face which will last all day, no doubt! *wink! wink!* Fondly.. read more
"A moment of realization is worth a thousand prayers" - Woody Harrelson as Mickey Knox in Natural Born Killers. This is what came to mind when reading your poem. Self acceptance and embracing your true nature is one of the journeys in life. I hope to see things as they are rather than how they're "supposed to be". I often wonder if I'm doing a good enough job at it.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I believe we all think we're being authentic, but as we go on thru life, we find out so much more ab.. read more
I'm always impressed with your honesty. I feel if we can't be honest with ourselves, who would believe us? I like that you take the time to rhyme, I admit it, I'm too lazy to make the effort. Like you though, I write what I feel at the moment and hope others like it, rhyme or not.

Take care - Dave

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I have to put in effort to NOT rhyme! Sometimes I'm downright addicted to it! Thank you for apprecia.. read more
I like to quote Popeye, that sage of the sea, and say "I ams what I ams." I want honesty in all things, have aspired to it myself, and see it in you. We can't be what we're not. We just can't. Now, if everyone was that way, there'd be no lies. This is a very good thing you've written. Thank you.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Love "sage of the sea" . . . almost seems to beg a poem! I try to be honest. If I can't be honest wi.. read more
i loved reading the Velvetine Rabbit to my kids ...we all enjoyed it! great job in following the story line only in poetry in your own odd ball way ;)))) what was another banner of the 60's??? oh yes..."...let your freak flag fly!" .... you beautiful you, you :)
E.
ps. i do agree..it is a process and i think our "originality" has many debts to acknowledge ...the pen and paper have been round for so very long and always the "poets" ..and don't you just know when you have struck on something ...a phrase ..a twist ...etc. and really like it yourself ... yes ..odd balls one and all ...but honest eh!?

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

I make all my own Facebook postings, using various artwork I find & like, & then adding words of my .. read more
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

ahahahahaha sooo i show my aged bones once again .. you spry little thing you ;)
Our writings are original and authentic . Even though it makes us stand out like odd balls,I prefer to be original than, one more in the crowd! You are very bold and tackle any subject with such a gusto! I believe that you have always been original and authentic!

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

9 Months Ago

Thank you very much . . . this is special becuz of the high regard I have for you, your writing, & y.. read more
Mrudula Rani

9 Months Ago

You are welcome, and thank you for the compliment. All the best

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