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Becoming Authentic

Becoming Authentic

A Poem by barleygirl
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just for fun . . .

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We all think we got there lickety-split
nobody deems oneself a bit counterfeit
unintentional fakery we humbly submit
must be a myth that simply doesn’t fit.

Not likely amongst those carefully kept
or anyone with a spirit that’s never leapt
lest careful confines be madly overstepped
while expectations are wildly windswept.

It takes all one’s life to become truly real
thick protective layers that take years to peel
realizing our assumptions are no big deal
and there’s no such thing as a heart of steel.

All former freakishness don’t matter at all
whether curvy or lithe, squatty or tall
nobody needs a comprehensive overhaul
as soon as we see we’re each an oddball.

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Inspired by a passage from the book: Velveteen Rabbit . . .

He said, "You become. It takes a long time. That's why it doesn't happen often to people who break easily, or have sharp edges, or who have to be carefully kept. Generally, by the time you are Real, most of your hair has been loved off, and your eyes drop out, and you get loose in the joints and very shabby. But these things don't matter at all, because once you are Real, you can't be ugly, except to people who don't understand."



© 2017 barleygirl



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I'm always impressed with your honesty. I feel if we can't be honest with ourselves, who would believe us? I like that you take the time to rhyme, I admit it, I'm too lazy to make the effort. Like you though, I write what I feel at the moment and hope others like it, rhyme or not.

Take care - Dave

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Days Ago

I have to put in effort to NOT rhyme! Sometimes I'm downright addicted to it! Thank you for apprecia.. read more



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I must start saying, how absolutely truthful this is. But, well, coming from you, I could not expect less....lol... I ENJOYED so much, at times I smile (right from the beginning... :-) ...Then I laughed )at the end) And what a wonderful way to finish a reading...laughing. You are not great in this one...you are Magnificent!!!
And the passage from the Velveteen Rabbit? As truthful and accurate as your poem!!
Stay happy Dear Margie...Kisses on your cheeks for this one, because it is making me go to bed smiling or and: laughing!!!!

Posted 1 Day Ago


"A moment of realization is worth a thousand prayers" - Woody Harrelson as Mickey Knox in Natural Born Killers. This is what came to mind when reading your poem. Self acceptance and embracing your true nature is one of the journeys in life. I hope to see things as they are rather than how they're "supposed to be". I often wonder if I'm doing a good enough job at it.

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I'm always impressed with your honesty. I feel if we can't be honest with ourselves, who would believe us? I like that you take the time to rhyme, I admit it, I'm too lazy to make the effort. Like you though, I write what I feel at the moment and hope others like it, rhyme or not.

Take care - Dave

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Days Ago

I have to put in effort to NOT rhyme! Sometimes I'm downright addicted to it! Thank you for apprecia.. read more
I like to quote Popeye, that sage of the sea, and say "I ams what I ams." I want honesty in all things, have aspired to it myself, and see it in you. We can't be what we're not. We just can't. Now, if everyone was that way, there'd be no lies. This is a very good thing you've written. Thank you.

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Love "sage of the sea" . . . almost seems to beg a poem! I try to be honest. If I can't be honest wi.. read more
i loved reading the Velvetine Rabbit to my kids ...we all enjoyed it! great job in following the story line only in poetry in your own odd ball way ;)))) what was another banner of the 60's??? oh yes..."...let your freak flag fly!" .... you beautiful you, you :)
E.
ps. i do agree..it is a process and i think our "originality" has many debts to acknowledge ...the pen and paper have been round for so very long and always the "poets" ..and don't you just know when you have struck on something ...a phrase ..a twist ...etc. and really like it yourself ... yes ..odd balls one and all ...but honest eh!?

Posted 5 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

I make all my own Facebook postings, using various artwork I find & like, & then adding words of my .. read more
Einstein Noodle

5 Days Ago

ahahahahaha sooo i show my aged bones once again .. you spry little thing you ;)
Our writings are original and authentic . Even though it makes us stand out like odd balls,I prefer to be original than, one more in the crowd! You are very bold and tackle any subject with such a gusto! I believe that you have always been original and authentic!

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Thank you very much . . . this is special becuz of the high regard I have for you, your writing, & y.. read more
Mrudula Rani

5 Days Ago

You are welcome, and thank you for the compliment. All the best
i wish i were this clever.
love it.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

You are very clever in a different way! I aspire to be as loosely-connected as you are in your writi.. read more
That there lickety split just has to be painful.
I tried it once. Tongue got caught in the neighbour's divorce proceedings.
But realness you can only hide for awhile. So you have to say what's on the can.
I gravitate to certain people, because they say the words I like to hear. But also because of their originality.
You're original.

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Well, now I'll be strutting for half the day . . . to be original is the ultimate goal in writing, I.. read more
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Gee
Kinda relates to my efforts at writing. When I first landed here I was all rhyme and more rhyme as I thought that was what folk wanted. Took me a little time to realise that all writing is read, always accepted, so I now post any ol' piffle, and luckily, a fee folk enjoy it.
Another thought provoking , well put together piece Margie

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Days Ago

Love hearing about your writing journey on this website. I've changed so much in the 2 yrs I've been.. read more
Gee

5 Days Ago

Twas my pleasure m'dear
When pursuing an ambition, we all use an "adopted" persona, in order to impress. Then we learn how to be ourselves again as we leave the artificial world of conformity. But the experience is not wasted,as now we can even learn to laugh at ourselves. I enjoyed both your rhyme and reason in justifying this... (((Hugs )))

Posted 6 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Days Ago

I remember being in my 30's when I studied a little Tai Chi & the written text I was using hit me ov.. read more

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