New Year Dance

New Year Dance

A Poem by barleygirl
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an imaginary whimsy . . .

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Swooning to her sway, I admire her preen and prance
performing my bit part in their seesaw circumstance
alas I splash her wretched spouse a stiff and spiteful shot
a couple saloon patrons present me a juggernaut.

Bombarding him with booze, I’ll not be his party pooper
oblivious to his treasure he stumbles into a stupor
far from his grizzled slouch her crimson shape twirls
behind the bar I fancy my face flooded by her curls.

I’m laden with longing when I watch her pirouette
across the dance floor she spins traces of her regret
such a squander with her oaf sprawled across my bar
if only she would honor me, I’d treat her like my star.

With a brand new calendar dawns a brand new act
by a sudden twist of fate I’ve been sorely whacked
realizing all my dreams have been hopelessly deluded
her new partner’s gender shows men are now excluded.




© 2018 barleygirl



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barleygirl
Inspired by the artwork . . .

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Roaring music, flashing lights, the smell of sweat wafting the dancing crowd. But one woman walks in, with the attention of all the desirous. For she walks with beauty, and a confidence beyond all. Blooming red burns cheeks, as they realize, she will never care for them at all. (Don't mind this small text. It simply spurted out of me!)

I loved this so much! Your words sent me to the dance floor, where all minds remained unconcerned. But most of all, the final twist was what left me smiling yet, pitying the young man. An amazing read! Love, Panda.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Days Ago

I spent the first 30 years of my adult life making assumptions about people from afar, the way we do.. read more
PandaPeaceful

3 Days Ago

You know, I think that at a certain point, we all make assumptions. Our eyes read your poem, thinkin.. read more
barleygirl

3 Days Ago

I'm honored!!!!!!!!! *smile*



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Roaring music, flashing lights, the smell of sweat wafting the dancing crowd. But one woman walks in, with the attention of all the desirous. For she walks with beauty, and a confidence beyond all. Blooming red burns cheeks, as they realize, she will never care for them at all. (Don't mind this small text. It simply spurted out of me!)

I loved this so much! Your words sent me to the dance floor, where all minds remained unconcerned. But most of all, the final twist was what left me smiling yet, pitying the young man. An amazing read! Love, Panda.

Posted 4 Days Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Days Ago

I spent the first 30 years of my adult life making assumptions about people from afar, the way we do.. read more
PandaPeaceful

3 Days Ago

You know, I think that at a certain point, we all make assumptions. Our eyes read your poem, thinkin.. read more
barleygirl

3 Days Ago

I'm honored!!!!!!!!! *smile*
Love the creativity here. I'm sure someone else has said it by now, but a picture is worth a thousand words, and you seemed to have found some of them! As always, I enjoy the way you twist your words to deliver your messages.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

4 Days Ago

As a technical writer for 30+ years, I was a very cerebral writer . . . being on this website for 2 .. read more
The dance, the song. Make us forget our sadness and we become fearless again. I enjoyed the poem dear friend. I want to dance now.
Coyote

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

It's been decades since I've been in a bar or danced in a crowd! Love remembering times that were so.. read more
Coyote Poetry

1 Week Ago

Me too. I raised fours kids and I got older. You are welcome dear friend.
A tale be told the fashion swings into the irony of confusing genders among the barroom brawl. Really like this story Margie, words that become addicted to the soul.

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

So many times we look at a situation from afar & come up with so many assumptions! I've done that to.. read more
There is something utterly and beautifully decadent about bodies a'tango!

Have come to the conclusion that you could write a wondrous poem about anything and with perfect meter. This reminds me of a b/white 1930s movie, smokey club rather than bar.. a mix of clientele, an air of daring.. and that finish so very plausible. Love this.. is different, is exciting.. great write.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

It has been about 3 decades since I've been in a bar, but back in my younger days, I did pour a litt.. read more
emmajoy

1 Week Ago

I have a way of interpretting only too right or only too wrong.. so, my pleasure in having a try at .. read more
A twist ending here. I could picture the scene so perfectly. The imagery is stunning. I liked how you wrote from the perspective of a man. Also liked the way she fooled all the men in the bar....quite the lady! :) Your rhyming, as always, is wonderful. Enjoyed the unique subject matter. Lydi**

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Some days it feels like I've already written all the poems from my own POV, so it's time to try on o.. read more
dear Margie... the song "Frankie and Johnnie" came to mind.! A New Years dance is full of surprises.! I had a New Years kiss full of whiskers. Your poems are always Jazzy. truly, Pat

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

This is a very fun share! Thanks for the visual of a kiss full of whiskers! My dog was tangled in my.. read more
Patricia Wedel

5 Days Ago

Good morning Marge... My I-phone gegot moody for a few days and would not let me return your comment.. read more
It is good to have an 'imaginary whimsy'. You have changed your 'voice', but you have kept your style. And I love the twist in the tale at the end. I enjoyed your poem.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

To me, writing with a very different POV is like doing exercise! *wink! wink!* Thanks for sharing yo.. read more
i admire you taking on the challenge to present from a foreign perspective .. she surely must be some beauty as the bar tender allows himself to swoon a bit ...the stark picture of her dumb sh%#@@^ partner is vivid ... i can just feel the bar tender holding himself back from pronouncing a hit the road bouncing in his direction ... and then the surprise comes in closing ..and surprised i was .. at least he avoided some awkward situations in his surprise .. poor boy :(
E.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Some days, I think I've already written all the dog poems I have in me, so I try on a different POV!.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

hugs Marge! most of the bar scenes i recall were pretty hectic and are hazy a bit ..... :} always in.. read more
barleygirl

4 Days Ago

Thank you for this memorable share *smile*
Okay Margie. I'm pissed, out the game.
I wake up to find you've stole my bird.
Is this one of your new year resolutions.
Are you batting for the other side now.
She's a crap dancer anyhow. lol

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paul Bell

1 Week Ago

You ok out there. Hows the weather.
barleygirl

1 Week Ago

We had no rain since last Feb, then we got 10 cm in 2 days!!! I'm lucky to be far from the burned ar.. read more
Paul Bell

1 Week Ago

I was hearing about the mudslides. You be careful.

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