Blue Moon Swoon

Blue Moon Swoon

A Poem by barleygirl
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just for fun . . .

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Distant dreams harshly harpooned and strewn
a loon faintly croons down by Phantom Lagoon
my broken heart swoons under a lofty balloon
it only ever happens once in a blue moon.

A late night commune with Rocky Raccoon
passion rains down a monstrous monsoon
impugned by impulse for flesh finely-hewn
awaiting the hex of the next blue moon.

Naked bodies spoon on a ravished sand dune
sensual synapses synchronize a new tune
blue moon swoon will be ending too soon
when Rocky reverts to a bumbling buffoon.




© 2018 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
Tonight (Jan 31) is the second full moon in the same calendar month . . . that is, I'll be howling at the mystic blue moon! *yippee!*

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This howling thing you get up to. Is this legal.
Do all the neighbours come out at the same time.
What I'm really asking is. Is this a mass skinny dipping, under the pretext it's blue moon night.
It's blue moon night.
We get naked in delight.
Run about the hills.
It's a lovely sight.
Grab the nearest guy.
Howl at the moon.
Hope he lasts all night.
Doesn't come to soon.
The moon's gone down.
So has he.
It really did come to soon.
That blue moon.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Days Ago

Sorry I just now got back onto this website, after being "shunned" for 2 weeks! Now I've got to get .. read more
Paul Bell

6 Days Ago

Took me twenty minutes to get that review on. It crashed after that. Blaming your blue moon. lol
barleygirl

6 Days Ago

Probably posted too many moons . . .



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A hysterical but cynical piece, Margie. You do have a gift for finding and placing the perfect rhyming words. This might be a record. I always admire how you can playfully weave such emotion into your work. Too bad for Rocky and the other buffoons under the moon (my best rhyme in a review). Sorry... Another well-crafted, lighthearted poem. Despite the Rocky bashing, it was outstanding. :)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I wasn't really bashing ole Rocky . . . just expressing my own personal weakness for kicking a guy a.. read more
i was there with you sister ..howling together we were ...its still quite a super moon now .. lighting up all the forest and land with moonglow ..what a special and spectacular thing to witness ...i knew you would have a poem out on its behalf quicker than most ..love love love ya Margie! :)
:)
E.
ps and reading all the alliteration "..ewn"s is a french delight ;) (tweeks the tongue)

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

i meant all those "...ewns" tickled the tongue .... speaking Frenchly ... mhwwwwwwwwwwuah!
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

It's been so very long, the thought of THAT kind of French speaking has slipped my mind! *sigh!*
Einstein Noodle

2 Weeks Ago

ahahahahahaha ...hugs barley girl ;)
This was a really fun read with all the "oon" rhymes happening. You used some really great words right from the start: "a loon faintly croons down by Phantom Lagoon" That line was a real gem as the ideas and the meaning of the rhymed words were so complimentary to each other while the sound of the sentence itself was unique, musical, and blooming with the loon's tune. The 'oon' rhyme almost mimicked a loon's call, like a bit of onomatopoeia buried in the text, subtle, but I think present enough to be mentioned:)

Not sure I totally catch the Rocky Raccoon reference, though I didn't feel like I needed to for this stanza. I really liked the second line of the second stanza: "passion rains down a monstrous monsoon". The rain/monsoon imagery used with passion seemed perfect to me and the whole stanza I thought was creatively worded and well crafted.

The third stanza I think I may have taken the least from, maybe it was the Rocky Raccoon reference flying over my head. The first three lines made sense, but I feel like I missed a punchline. That's on me though, I think I better go do some homework on Rocky Raccoon.

Fun poem, as advertised in the description. You did not disappoint, and as I said before, the wordplay was lively, entertaining, and had a unique auditory effect when read aloud. Thanks for sharing this Margie:)

Hailey


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Rocky Raccoon was drawn from an old song out of the 1970's with silly lyrics. The ending is just my .. read more
Hailey Juliet

2 Weeks Ago

Ah ok, makes sense now lol;)
My pleasure to read and review!
dear Margie... "It's only a paper moon" song comes to my mind. I would love ❤️ to hear Elvis 🕺Presley sing "Blue Moon" and also Frank Sinatra... I took an early photo last night on January 30, 2018. This evening the sunset was gorgeous here in Fredericksburg, Virginia. I cannot 😴 sleep, however, the night is just beginning two hours before midnight. Your poem is mystical and your poetry divine. truly, Pat

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I love it when my poet friends describe their surroundings gracefully as you've done . . . it lets m.. read more
Patricia Wedel

2 Weeks Ago

dear Margie... I have always been drawn to Toby Keith as though an earthquake is about to change the.. read more
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I confess, I'm partial to a raw & rugged country boy like T.K. -- rather than the flashy pop cowboys.. read more
You have Mother Nature's madness on you mind. While the blue moon spreads his magic. Coyotes tô Raccoons are all love sick and searching for mating partners in your wonderful wilderness. There supposed to be a lunar eclipse too today ! - um beijo.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I didn't know about the eclipse, I might've missed it. I'll have to look that up. Since I'm alone mo.. read more
Loved it last evening and got up early, 6, this morning to enjoy it some more against a dark, dark blue sky. You are right Margie, there is something special about a full moon especially a 'blue" one.
I get the idea you don't just enjoy the moon for itself, but for the the stimulation it stirs.

Take care - Dave

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Born in "cancer" the zodiac sign makes me a moonchild, so I'm extra crazy when it gets full, especia.. read more
Dave

2 Weeks Ago

Common - Margie , we all know by now that YOU don't need a blue moon to make you extra crazy.
.. read more
Hey, I got the blue moon swwooonn too.... You got ya finger on da pulse an all us lunatics are doin stuff our mamma's told us to avoid at all costs. Staring at it now, tis kind o creepy but ya dun it justice Margie sure enough..................A sight to behold, to treasure an write about.......N

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Since you're 12 hours ahead of me, you've got a jump on the madness, my friend. But I'll be meetin' .. read more
Neville Pettitt

5 Days Ago

Nug you too.........N
Amazing work. Love it. Great stuff, emotional and really digs deep. Thanks for sharing your work. If you fancy a challenge come and try my blog, I think you will like it. https://chrissyswritingchallenge.wordpress.com/

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for stopping by & sharing. I did go check out your blog, & even tho everything looks good .. read more
Our moon is playing hide and seek ... behind the dark clouds ... :))

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

We have some wispy cloud cover, but the moon is still shining thru! Thanks for sharing (((HUGS))) Fo.. read more
Galadriel

2 Weeks Ago

Finally now it's clear :))
barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

I've got to wait about 9 more hours . . . you're ahead of me! *smile*
A beautiful poem. I had a few Blue moon nights. I liked the places and thoughts in the poetry dear friend. I do believe the moon make us a bit more wild and free. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I enjoyed this one.
Coyote

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

2 Weeks Ago

Love this: "I do believe the moon make us a bit more wild and free." SOOO TRUE! *smile* Fondly, Marg.. read more
Coyote Poetry

2 Weeks Ago

I agree. Damn moon make us want to dance and sing when complete dear friend.

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