Too Much Cryin'

Too Much Cryin'

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by a song . . .

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Too much cryin’ . . .
dismal haze just a craze to confound
too much sighin’ . . .
exasperation exhales without a sound
too much spyin’ . . .
as we choke in a covert battleground.

Spy is crucifyin’ . . .
gnarled knobs daub discord all around
spy is nullifyin’ . . .
unity bonds are ruthlessly torn down
spy is amplifyin’ . . .
every wise guy has a spiel to expound.

This guy’s vilifyin’ . . .
far too frenzied to find common ground
this guy’s specifyin’ . . .
only ardent bootlickers will ever abound
this guy’s stratifyin’ . . .
praise his prerogative or get outa town.

Belly full of lyin’ . . .
pushing this partisan merry-go-round
we’ll soon be fryin’ . . .
instigator’s golf putts no longer resound
let’s keep on tryin’ . . .
till the world becomes a burial ground.



© 2018 barleygirl



Author's Note

barleygirl
Spin-off from an old Stevie Ray Vaughn
tune: "The Sky is Cryin'" . . .

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"every wise guy has a spiel to expound" your words read like song lyrics so I can well understand they were inspired by a song though I have not heard that one. I know of politicians on both sides of the aisle this could describe...especially now in the wake of the Marjory Stoneman Douglas shootings. Everyone pointing fingers....no one willing to take responsibility....it stinks. Your words are well written, Margie...and loved the rhyming. Lydi**

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I find it harder & harder to make a partisan statement about things becuz both sides have been so la.. read more
Lydia

6 Months Ago

That's true...I am very proud of them!
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

6 Months Ago

You're welcome. always a pleasure.



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"To Much Cryin'"
barleygirl,
All I can say is FUN. This poem is a refreshing play on words. I like the laid back and slang style you have integrated into your poem. It definitely has a jazzy feel. Stevie Ray Vaughn was an amazingly talented individual and quite the showman as well. My husband really liked and still respects his work. Great poem Miss Margie!!!
Blessings this Easter weekend to you. I hope you have some nice moments.
Kathy

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Thanks for appreciating my blend of the SRV vibe & my own observations. Even tho I was describing th.. read more
Wow!!! wonderful as always... rhythming helped it to be more magnificent...loved it

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

It's hard for me to give up on rhyming (I'm addicted) so the best I go for is trying to mix it up so.. read more
Wow, I may be far off but I feel the nuances and metaphors in this great folk- song (in my opinion) hit the ‘state of the union’ right in its non-existent heart. So rhythmic and musical with such a different form and rhyming pattern for you- it’s absolutely perfect. Your words are important, powerful, relevant, magnificent. I really love this one Margie, and I also love Stevie Ray Vaughn. I can hear her voice singing this. Brava!:))

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

Thank you for reading in between the lines. So much ridiculousness has happened since the "state of .. read more
Margie - It makes me feel so proud to have been a teacher. For most of my 45 years of teaching I taught American History, a subject I find not usually taught any more. It scares me when a Congressman who was being interviewed thought that Thomas Jefferson was the man who wrote the Constitution. Where do these men come from?! Young as they were my kids often came up with some very insightful thoughts. To hear what they had to say with regard to the various shootings was truly inspiring. I honestly believe that the best hope for this nation is in our young people, if we allow them to grow into their adulthood.

Take care - Dave

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dave

6 Months Ago

Aah shucks, it weren't nuttin! Honest to goodness I really really enjoyed it. The stories I could,.. read more
barleygirl

6 Months Ago

Yes! These are stories that I would love to have you tell & share! *smile*
Dave

6 Months Ago

Someday. I promise.

Take care - Dave
an unveiled social commentary? Chuckling here.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I'm glad you're chuckling becuz it's a waste of time to take any of this too seriously! *smile* Fond.. read more
Chris

6 Months Ago

If ya can't laugh only cryin' is left ya know...
Great song and love the updated lyrics for our uniquely weird times that we live in.
I picture this as being viewed on tv. All the different flavours of anger and bitterness, from politicians, evangelists and celebrities who think because they have an opinion, we need to hear it.
I discovered a cure a while back, but kept it to myself in case I started trending. Turn it off...put your foot through it, or a bullet. After a while, you'll be amazed at how much of a s**t you don't give.
And if anyone disagrees with you, ask them to explain the Kardashians to you and why they are famous.
The defence rests your honour :)

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lorry

6 Months Ago

My own wild ruggedness is closed until further notice. Red alert snow warnings in effect from now, a.. read more
barleygirl

6 Months Ago

As a California wimp (whining when it even gets close to frosty), I'm humbled by the endurance of mo.. read more
Lorry

6 Months Ago

Endurance my a*s.. We just go back to bed and cry. :)
Four feet of snow in last 24 hours, can.. read more
common ground? if i think politics here...it's like the Civil War in congress and the senate.
the Blue vs. the Gray...and even after the war..all the reconstruction needed.

amazing piece with deeply rooted passion that shows an ardent wish for things to get better...the in-fighting has to stop.
j.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I never paid much attention to how the government was going until the last couple administrations & .. read more
I don't know whether it's my poor eyesight, or my weird imagination, but I,m sure I could see an image of your "wise guy" in the small picture accompanying this poem.Could this be my subliminal thought, or prescience on your part. Back to the poem..... This laissez faire attitude by a "leader" who governs by tweets is so well described by your rhyme and reason innuendo, that it is almost a photograph in itself. Will search out the song, so I can get the full benefit of the rhythm. Keep those punches flying, Margie. (((Hugs))) N.



Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

Living in an agricultural area, I'm surrounded by people on the other side of this argument, not to .. read more
cool, telling write. i like how this highlights some not-so-nice things folks do. building, building to the point of our own undoing.

"only ardent bootlickers will ever abound." go along to get along. reminded me of:

"Laugh, and the world laughs with you; weep, and you weep alone". - line in,''Solitude' by author & poet Ella Wheeler Wilcox

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

WOW! So cool to get your nicely detailed impressions, becuz it's quite different from what I was thi.. read more
"every wise guy has a spiel to expound" your words read like song lyrics so I can well understand they were inspired by a song though I have not heard that one. I know of politicians on both sides of the aisle this could describe...especially now in the wake of the Marjory Stoneman Douglas shootings. Everyone pointing fingers....no one willing to take responsibility....it stinks. Your words are well written, Margie...and loved the rhyming. Lydi**

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I find it harder & harder to make a partisan statement about things becuz both sides have been so la.. read more
Lydia

6 Months Ago

That's true...I am very proud of them!
The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)

6 Months Ago

You're welcome. always a pleasure.

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