Unrequited Love

Yes, yes, I know. Why the heck is Becca writing love poems!!! To be honest I'm not completely sure.

If I could write you a poem

I wouldn’t waste words on trite

Phrases

Or words of love

Or descriptions of your eyes

Or words

Or smile

 

If wrote you a poem

It would be empty

Because describing you

Is like describing water

Or time

Or happiness

 

When I write you a poem

I hope you’ll unknowingly

See you

In the words that I’ve left out

And that you’ll recognize my touch

In every line

Every phrase

Every word

 

When I’ve written you a poem

It will show you something new

Something

You’ve never considered

But might wonder about now

Something different

Strange

But something that might be

Wonderful

 

When you’re reading my poem

Don’t think about the meaning

Or the writing

Think about life

And how truth is only found

By those who make mistakes

And take chances

 

When you’ve read my poem

Remember to dream

Only dreamers will find a reality

A home,

A love

Worth keeping

 

 

Author's Note

Love poems aren't my forte...

Reviews

[Kay]

I absolutely love the flow of this poem, I can wholly identify with the feelings. I applaud your ability to convey these feelings whilst using such a fluid vocabulary.

[Becca Bishop]

Wow thank you so much!!! Reading back on it I thought it was a bit repetitive but I've decided that my interpretation sucks and yours is awesome :P Thanks again!!!

[Lina Grey]

Are you sure? this is gorgeous Becca! So sober, so open. It's lovely and honest and real hun. Seriously, one of the best love poems I've ever read. And I don't really like love poems at all. Wonderful write doll :)

[Becca Bishop]

Oops there goes my head again :P I'm seriously starting to think that this site isn't good for me ego at all. It's so confusing to know you're bad at something and then have other people say the opposite... Yippee for not being obsessed with love poems!!! High five!!! Wait, that won't work...thought five!!! :D :D :D :D :D

[Lina Grey]

LOL i know, i feel the same way on here sometimes. But, opinions are opinions, and peole tend to be their own worst critic, so... THOUGHT FIVE! :D

[Becca Bishop]

Oooh...look at the smart person!!!! You know, you're probably right but there's no way I'm gonna admit it :D Also, your thought five hit me in the eye...so you might want to work on that :P

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

"Love poems aren't my forte..." - but you did this one so well, Becca!! The muse likes you today. You had me hypnotized with those words.. I was seeing things that weren't there.. like I was the volunteer from the audience in a hypnotist's routine. Only there wasn't anything routine about this poem. You, seriously I say, have expressed some of the ethereal insight that is necessary to experience the grandeur of it all. But that's just my take on it.. tonight. :)

[Becca Bishop]

Whoa!!! You know how the Grinch's heart grows like...I don't know, ten sizes over the course of a few seconds??? I think my head just did that :P Thanks :D Are you sure you're not just loopy from eating too much chocolate cake or something? I really don't think this is that good :P And if you are, WHY AREN'T YOU SHARING THE CHOCOLATE CAKE WITH ME!!!!! WHY!!!!!!!!!! Well, even if you don't share your cake with me, thanks for the review. It's always nice to be told something is good when you think it's about as not good as it can get :) :D :D :D

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Let me point out some of the more inspired lines (imho):

"I wouldn’t waste words on trite
Phrases"

or

"When I write you a poem
I hope you’ll unknowingly
See you
In the words that I’ve left out
And that you’ll recognize my touch"

...but all the others are equally profound in my opinion.

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

P.S. No cake for you! You're too wired up as it is!! :p

[Becca Bishop]

Ah ha! You just proved me right!!!! Inspired??? Profound??? ME????!!! BWAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH!!!! Is it national joke day already???
And why won't you share your cake with me?! I've been a really good girl lately!! I've only got arrested...what...like twenty times in the past week. I deserve cake! CAKE CAKE CAKE CAKE CAKE CAKE CAKE!!!!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

National Joke Day is August 16th, per Google. I didn't say I wouldn't "share" my cake with you but I did mean to say that you shall have no cake until you wash your mittens (you naught kitten) - and calm down. The "calm down" being the operative phrase. It's chocolate.. are you drooling yet? :)

OK, I retract profound but I'm leaving inspired. (Intentional double entendre)

[Becca Bishop]

It must be a sign that National Joke Day is three days before my birthday :D :D :D No wonder I'm crazy!!! Ok, so let's just get this straight:
You have cake. I do not. You won't share my cake unless I 'calm down' which we both know is about as impossible as it gets. So in other words you're saying that I'm never going to get any of your cake and what's more, you deliberately phrased your words so as to give me hope that I'd get some cake when you really knew that there was no possible way it could ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever ever happen. Ever. YOU'RE SO MEAN!!!! AND SMART!!!!
And yes, I am drooling right now while plotting my revenge ;D

Ha! I KNEW I was right :D :D :D :D :D :D POINT FOR BECCA!!!!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Might I point out, per your last salvo, "You won't share my cake..." ... so YOU have cake? Interesting. If YOU have CAKE then why do you want a piece of MY cake? Are you a greedy little kitten? I've heard this before somewhere, can't quite put my talon on it... oh, yes, "What's mine is mine and what's yours is negotiable." Hmmm. I sigh, on your behalf of course. Please, take my cake. It's yours. I give it to you freely. But, I think perhaps in the long run you will not enjoy it ever so much as you may currently imagine. The rabbit wins. The tortoise looses. I much my veggies apologetically. {munch, munch} ^_^

[Becca Bishop]

Dang you're tricky! I meant to put 'your cake' there because I don't have any!!! Why does everyone else get cake and I don't??? I find this an extremely bad situation and believe that the only way we can possible fix things is if everyone gives me a piece of their cake. It's the only way.

Oh my gosh!!! A twist in events!! Are you really giving me your cake??? *Angelic choir* This....this is the happiest moment of my entire life!!!!

Isn't it the other way around? The rabbit loses and the the tortoise wins? Has everybody been telling me the story wrong??? >;( Well! That's just great!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

^_^ {hugs}

[Becca Bishop]

Well...I guess I accept your apology...I better go make cake now :P