Nowhere I have to go.

It's kind of scetchy but I like it

I'm going down this lonely road,

Watching the headlights on the ground.

I roll my window down to feel the cool breeze,

As the breeze flows down my back I don't hear a sound.

 

The feeling of having nowhere I have to go,

Makes me feel free.

One of the few times i feel i don't have to know,

One of the few times I can really be me.

 

I look up at the big full moon,

I see the beautiful stars.

I'm coming to my exit soon,

As I begin to see more cars.

 

Part of me says just keep driving,

The other says go home.

Part of me wants to continue this adventure,

For the permanent freedom as I turn off my phone.

 

I'm coming to my exit as i see the numbers 109,

I get closer & closer,

Until i pass the sign.

 

I pass the sign I'm supposed to turn off at so I don't even turn around,

I pull off after about an hour to go up to this mountain.

As I get out of my car there is absolutely no sound.

 

I sit on the top of this beautiful creation,

Over looking the river flowing below.

This is really a beautiful nation,

When I have nowhere I have to go.

Author's Note

I hope you like this!!

Reviews

[Annebelle Ashire]

No ''kidding'' this was a wonderful write!
Absolutely astounding to one's eyes!!

These last two lines,
The beauty of them - the complexity of "knowing" !

""This is really a beautiful nation,
When I have nowhere I have to go.""

Once again you have drawn me in.

We all have so many places to go - so many things to do - and material items we
simply "have" to have - so essential.
We're driving to work [ crossing the river ]
We're watching our kids [ playing in the grass at the park - mid-day ]
We're giving some speech [ with nature's outstanding view through a window ]
We're talking on the phone [ it's raining outside ]
We're walking to the store [ birds are chirping and the sun is setting ]
We're going to bed [ you've missed the sunset ]

This write -
i can see myself in the car -
i can feel the wind,
and the cool breeze on a summer's night..
This was absolutely wonderful - and I can't wait to read more.

~*AC*~

[+xDrunkenFairytalex+]

Something Koolio about my review.... I HAVE NOTHING NEGATIVE TO SAY!! *Yayness!*
LoL. I have to honestly say... you're the ONLY poet whose writings have ALL cought my attention.
You're absolutely wonderful in my book. *perfect-a-mundo*
Eye

[These Haunted Hallways]

Oh, indeed, it was excellent!! Kinda romantic in a way, too. I do this all the time, actually, whenever I want to drive my car; just to get away from it all. I just want to drive forever and ever, and i dont want to stop. The warm air in my face, the smells of the grass and forests, and the sound of night all around you. And ya wished ya had somebody you loved right by ur side to feel, kiss, and comfort you while ur driving. Almost like a romantic story where a guy and girl just run away together and love each other or somethin hehe. Yea, i definitley felt this. These truly are some remarkable poems!!! I love them all. U should definitely put these into a book ;) Thanx for sending these to me. Love them!!!

B.A.

[Lyndsay Castro]

I really do like this. Sometimes the feeling can be good, and sometimes it can be bad. I like the positive spin you put on it.

[Chloe Madison Taylor.]

i like it.
some parts had awesome flow, and other parts were kind of lacking.
but overalli thought it was kickass.

[M@]

Wonderful idea and wonderful feeling. Some of the best times I can imagine is when I've decided to forget about gas prices and drive around aimlessly for an hour or two.

Something struck me as odd throughout this poem however. Even though I as a reader feel as you do, as if I have nowhere to go, I'm feeling trapped withink the rhyme scheme you put in front of me, which seems a bit contradictory to the piece's nature. Coupled with the wordy nature of this piece (which is understanable as this reads more as a narrative poem than a lyrical poem), it makes me read under a forced set of rules, which in turn makes it a bit choppy for me to read.

However, as others before me have said, you've got great imagry. As you play around with the narrative moreso than the highly adjective, it gives the sense of this actually happening to you, and we're along for the ride; not a bad thing at all, it gives us, the readers, a chance to look at the world as you see it, thereby giving us another impression to live by ourselves. Excellently done.

Nice work, keep it up.

[Reborn A Phoenix]

wow this is good really good i dont like it i love it hun

[Noah]

love it love it, we all feel lost sometimes- wonderful job as always