never before

 

                  Never Before

 

 

 

I saw pain before my eyes

Never before had I.

 

I felt heart ache crawling its way into mine,

Never before did I think this was real.

 

I had loss creeping inside of me

Never before had i witnessed such a horrible thing.

 

I begged on hand and knee

Never before would this be.

 

I felt urges or rage inside

Never before could I.

 

I became weak with anguish

Never before had I known this.

 

I decided to run from what I had been seeing,

And now i feel alright.

 

Reviews

[Wildecat]

Liked this poem, very well written.

[anthony lopez]

very nice! i liked this one!

[Samuel Dickens]

I'm no learned poetry expert, but I like this. The question followed by "never before..." seems very creative.

[PianoandPage]

i like the image of "heart ache crawling" but the rest got sort of lost on me.

the repeated use of "never before" is effective but it didn't seem to lead me anywhere.

the ending too seemed rather abrupt and trivial after all the buildup.

i would consider explaining more about what specifically evoked these emotions.

i would consider keeping "never before" but using it in a deeper context.

hope this helps!