The Music Box

A story-telling poem that tells the tale of a beloved queen and her fate.

Walking along the streets

You hear a curious sound

You search until you've found the source

Intrigued by what you've found --

A tiny golden music box

Sitting on the ground

Appeared from nowhere 

it seemed to have done

Curious, curious

As would be to anyone

In puzzlement you wonder

and wonder yourself stiff

The thing you fail to realize

Is the long hidden myth

This music box - yes this same box

Belonged to Meredith. 

Ruled she did some centuries past

Beloved queen of Murrowfast

Graceful swan, gentle dove

This queen specialized in love

And what is more, in English lore

Young romance most did Meredith adore

Alas! The tale does not go on

Poor Meredith passed away one dawn

No one knows why

But for story's sake

They put it down to true heartbreak

Perhaps love itself was too much to take

That golden box there in your hand

I'll say this once, so understand

Is Meredith's surviving wish/command

The music box, her most prized possession

Appears to those with deep depression

True love the box will bring

Love such that the heart will sing

Once touched, a spell unfolds

Love at last! Joy untold!

Poor Meredith, a secret hid

Covered up the truth she did

See, Meredith so full of passion

and love that made the heart to burn

Never had a special gent

 To give her that love in return

And that is why her music box

Is found among the sad

To give its finders a shot at true love

The one thing Meredith never had

Author's Note

I'm not really used to writing poems, so am a bit rusty on format.

Is the rhyming tacky? Or does it fit?

Reviews

[DA]

I know this is someone's else review, but it tells exactly how I feel about this poem:

"I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together. "

[Mary]

very far from tacky, it whirls and twirls. sounds like a bards tale. perfect.

[Justine Mclatchie]

I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together.

[reflectingus]

THIS IS GOING IN MY FAVORITES!!!
Loved this. I love the way you unfolded a story, which kind of just took me back in time, in a sophisticated, funny, un-talked era where people owned music boxes and mourned over lost love hahha. The effect is amazing, I can still feel the chills linger after I read the last line. The rhyming is perfect, it was so nice to read. I also love the language, and this blend of words 'from the centuries past'. This is such a great story told in a beautiful way. Keep writing!

[Kate W]

I'm not one for reading poetry but I really enjoyed this.

[Leslie Philibert]

Well written poem with a good story, good write.

[AK]

Beautiful poem! It's not tacky at all, quite the opposite frankly! Wonderful write!

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Tacky! Why would you think that? It's perfect! I love it when poems tell fictional stories!

[Priya]

A bit rusty? You must be kidding me! This is absolutely splendid! :) The rhyming just made the poem altogether more lovely! I was enthralled by your ability to narrate a story in rhyme.

[E. Ryan Miller]

I thought the rhyme scheme made it flow very nicely. I love the fact that this poem reads a little bit like a self-reverie, and is a narrative as well.