The dream of a world

a poem about the way I dream of a world

 

Each day I sit and dream

of a world with no boundaries,

a world were every smile is a beam,

where every heart is as clean as new laundry;

 a world full of laughter,

where tears have no power,

fun bears no charter,

authority has no tower.

Where fear does no harm;

nor, does hate exist,

where love has its charm,

only highest hope persists.

Where envy is gone,

where only happiness lives,

and war has moved on …

such is my dream for this world.

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Benson!
This is about as beautiful a dream as one can imagine, and to read about it in a deeply meaningful, heart-touching poem, makes it feel all the more real and appealingly ideal.
You might revisit it to see if some rhymes may not be better matched, and wording so that it flows in spots a wee bit better, but all-in-all, you've a wonderful poem, with some genuine hope and emotive power to encourage everyone.
Perhaps, a softer font and color to convey your feelings and intents, in italics, too, maybe.

Thank you, My friend, for sharing your dream and fine skills with us! ⁓ Richard

[Benson Osuji]

Thank you sir I will correct my mistakes

[Richard🖌]

Amazingly improved, Benson … it really shines now!
Great changes, that inspire with real impact.

[Benson Osuji]

thanks for the corrections

[marcus]

I share your dream, I hope one day we can all see this world!!

[Benson Osuji]

it however is a near impossible dream

[marcus]

well..nothing's impossible, but we do have a long way to go still..

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A world I would love to live in...a beautiful Dream, Benson...

[Benson Osuji]

sorry I couldn't send you that red request thanks for your review

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no worries... you are welcome :)

[rickm97]

Very well done, my friend.
I, too, wish for all these things.
When God created our world, he made it perfect...
...until he made man, replete with imperfections, to see if we could be smart enough to overcome our differences and to become one with each other, the 'harmony of humanity' if you will.
I feel as a whole he have accomplished very little here on this earth, except to perfect ways of ridding this earth of mankind itself. We have become quite efficient at killing one another, and not so good at preserving humanity.
Arrogance has trumped humility...
..but one must never give up hope.
Keep that hope alive.

Always write from the heart, as you have done here.

[Benson Osuji]

Thanks for your comment

[PANDORA]

What a great write!! Your bio says you're only 14. I can't believe a 14 year old wrote this. Keep writing because you are a natural talent.

A world were every smile was a beam---instead of "was" I would put "is"

Excellent! Thanks for the read.

[Benson Osuji]

Thanks for your comment

[Harry Will]

Wow! Sounds so ideal, existing only in utopia. The lines are clearly woven to elicit a wistful thinking.

[Benson Osuji]

thanks for your review thanks again

[Harry Will]

You are welcome. Keep it up.

[Serge Wlodarski]

Well done. Of course, that world will never exist. But you always need to understand how to measure yourself.

[GreenShoes]

You seemed to have an ABAB rhyme scheme going with the exception of the last line.

It's an upbeat, positive poem, and I love that. It was an enjoyable read. :)

[Benson Osuji]

thanks it means a lot to me