If I were a lunatic

If I were a lunatic

A Poem by Elizabeth


if I were a lunatic
the world would be orange
or purple
or inside out

down would be left
and squares would smell like tangerines

if I were Alice, I would smash the looking glass
and hide my meds under my tongue
until lights out

but I am not a lunatic
and the world is not orange
or purple
or inside out

and squares have never smelled like tangerines

© 2011 Elizabeth



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a very strong poem this,an astounding, unusual poem that I will look at again..

Posted 4 Years Ago


Simple and direct = message conveyed.
Thanks for sharing.
Loved reading it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


very well written----I like your profile about the need to write that way---consider that capital letters exist---and punctuation---as long as you are not texting---some writers write like they are texting---this site has mechanical problems with quotes, for example, so, I understand there are things that don't work out---notice all the dashes I use---a lazy way of forgetting about punctuation---I'm just saying, for me--the lack of capital letters or punctuation sticks out----

Posted 4 Years Ago


avant security guard

4 Years Ago

if that's your style--fine--it's the words that are important--sometimes punctuation gets in the way.. read more
Emily B

4 Years Ago

the way she has the words set out on lines, orchestrates the flow of rhythm and cadence, punctuation.. read more
Elizabeth

4 Years Ago

Agreed. Thanks, Emily xo
you're my new best friend and I think we should write a story..

Posted 4 Years Ago


Richard

4 Years Ago

yes ... I mean ...would you be interested?
Elizabeth

4 Years Ago

Depends on my mood. PM me- let me know what you're thinking about.
Richard

4 Years Ago

ok I will :)
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a fascinating little-big poem!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Elizabeth

4 Years Ago

thanks :)
I love tangerines

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Synesthestia in writing is such a rare treat...I absolutely love that you included it in this piece because it fits so naturally (that is not to say people with synesthestia are lunatics *laugh* quite the contrary) I just mean it brings an image to mind that is not ordinarily brought...shapes have an aroma. Well done, this.

-kimmer

Posted 5 Years Ago


Elizabeth

5 Years Ago

I appreciate it, Kimmer. This may be one of my favorite pieces.
KAOlmsted

5 Years Ago

My pleasure...
oh, but some days . . .

Posted 5 Years Ago


Emily B

4 Years Ago

these are good words to come back to, artists are always suspect, i get tired of watching folks tryi.. read more
Elizabeth

4 Years Ago

Agreed. And thanks, love xo
Emily B

4 Years Ago

when I read this again, i felt a wave of sadness that

I am not a lunatic
and the .. read more
I am learning so much. I like this. What teachers I have now.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Elizabeth

5 Years Ago

:)
the moon makes weres into wolves..

God, the genius of the third stanza... the thrill of it, the plot and the inspiration..




Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Elizabeth

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