Thimbles and Freight Trains

my mind speeds
roars like a freight train
silence and stillness
still make me shudder

I had a plan to quiet the quiet
contain the train
I had pills and bottles
and expectations

I did not have
midnights and daisies
or thimbles for kisses

there is too much space
in here
too little freedom
out there

Reviews

[not here]

Hi Elizabeth.
You know, I was going to suggest that "silence and stillness still make me shudder" doesn't work... I wouldv'e been way wrong!
I read this twice and can't help but say: the whole thing works. :-)
Such a neat expression of your thoughts.
Thanks for sharing.

[London]

nice =]

[L]

Right! I did not have midnights and daisies or thimbles for kisses... fab. Love your work, Elizabeth. And unerring attention to grammar hehe. Too much like me.... ellipsis! There it is. It wasn't before, though, was it?

[TJ]

Wow! How do you manage to pack so much substance into so few words? Really amazing! I like the stanza about planning to use the pills to quiet your mind then you go on to say there's is too little freedom out there! That was genius!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

there is too much space
in here
too little freedom
out there

That ending really blew me away... You are quite the show stopper when it comes to poets.

[Lilly Negoi]

two thumbs up for this!

[Derek S.Keck]

there is too much space
in here
too little freedom
out there

I know that heart and soul. You’re one of the most talented writers I've ever met. I feel like we dip from the same well when it comes to writing.

[paul]

it's the quiet we don't like.
'quiet the quiet' -remarkable.
'contain the train' -too.

the title is fantastic. i don't quite understand 'thimbles for kisses' , but still, i love it.
the end is perfect.

again, i love your straightforward style, in which you say simple things (never said before) that could mean many things.