Where did we go wrong?

Where did we go wrong?

A Poem by Bhavya Kaushik
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many times when in our lives we found a relationship going on a wrong track but... we can only regret upon it..!!!!

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WHERE DID WE GO WRONG?

 

 

 

 

Where did we go wrong…..

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong…..

I cherished each and every moment of ours…

When we were more than friends…

And used to talk for continuous hours…

I still remember the lanes…

Where we used to sing songs of our gains…

I still love the flavour of chocolate….

As that was once your favourite…

But,

Everything is so changed now…

Iam still walking through the same lanes….

With each broken piece of my heart, having the same pain…

No more songs of our promises….

No more empty lies of our gains…

Why these chocolates are full of sourness….

As even they knew the reason of your fakeness……

Where did we go wrong…..

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong…..

My heart is still unwilling to believe that you’re gone….

Why did you left me alone…so alone….

These wounds they all are real….

Which even Time can’t heal….

Why you gave me such fake promises….

Promises about the unrealistic future of our lives….

Now Iam even afraid to love anyone again….

Because…..

I don’t want to walk alone on this same lane….

Having pieces of my heart into my hands….

Where did we go wrong….

Just tell me…

Where did we go wrong……

 

Once, Even I used to smile…

But now every relationship seems so unreal…

Yeah! I know the loss is all mine….

And for you there is a surprise......

See….. Iam still ALIVE………

I personally don’t want you to come back…

As you will surely laugh upon me….

Oh! See what you have done…

You made me a living LIE…

You made me a living LIE…..

These wounds won’t seem to heal…

This pain is just too real….

Where did I go wrong……

Just tell me…..

Where did I go wrong…..

Where did I go wrong……

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© 2009 Bhavya Kaushik



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It is a very touching poem my friend, especially when I know what exactly is going in your heart, in your mind. This poem Describes your state very clearly. You have a very special talent my freind, don't waste this. By reading this poem, my heart cries for you. I can't help it. Nor can any reader who reads your poem. Awsome compsition, keep it up! ~KA~

Posted 10 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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a very touching and a heart felt poem, showing how much painful it is when we lose our dear one, very well written....

"Now Iam even afraid to love anyone again….
Because…..
I don’t want to walk alone on this same lane….
Having pieces of my heart into my hands…."

wonderful lines...

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was a poem written from the heart... By the heart. Such a sad, and touching poem that can melt even the coldest of souls. Such pain and sadness radiated from this poem, it's hard to imagine someone feeling like this. Difficult for me anyways. I'm so sorry to you, or anyone that will and is feeling this way, and to anyone that reads this, please know that if you ever need someone to talk to, you can always go to a well trusted friend, and if you don't have one, you could go find one. Very good. I loved the emtion in this poem, even though it was quite saddening.

--Blood

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! What a great poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah, being afraid to trust anyone with your heart again...that is the part I hate most. Great poetry, my friend.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I won't ask you to let go or move on. You can't erase parts of your life that you've written with an honest heart and sincere feelings. Certain emotions are not reciprocated the way we wish they were. Sometimes two honest people may not be able to work on a relationship that both of them desire. The reasons for the break-up of a relationship maybe many. But the outcome is always sorrow.

And I believe that those who claim to put the past behind completely are those who did not love truly. I do not think you will ever get over this pain. This is a struggle that continues all life...perhaps, beyond...

You've done a great jb of conveying your emotions here. Very well penned.

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Often I asks the same question to myself but just like you I gets no reply and all I could say is
Where did I go wrong?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I agree with Kevin and I believe healing will come eventually. I do hope you develop this wonderful talent for words you have.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I'm sorry to know that your heart tics with such pain and sadness.Then again you're poem is wonderful.
So many strong feelings and emotions come out of your work...

I wish you nothing but the best!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Evokes strong emotion. What a blessing to have loved this much. Some people never find it. But the age old saying is still true, "Love hurts." It always has. It always will. Is this also a song lyric? All of your poems have a lyrical feel to them as if you are singing them. You very definitely have the gifting of a song writer.

In the last paragraph, one typo. For relation, did you mean to put ***relationship?*** That's the only necessary change that I saw...

Well done. :-)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I liked the with you started the write with where did WE go wrong and ended it with where did I go wrong.
It somehow says everything you wanna say from this write.
Very well written.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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